Black Poetry : Its been a minute since I actually put some real good ish on here so here u go

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by poeticlyspeakin, Mar 7, 2004.

  1. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yo I heard about ur status
    and how u got the fattest
    @ss with a pretty smile n u always wear ur hair down with glasses
    But u gotta man that locks u up n stocks u up with the latest fashion
    I see u in the mornings @ the bus stop on ur way to classes
    Cuz from what I hear ur goal is to be a doctor, but u dream of bein an actress
    So @ nights when he's not home, u sit in the mirror and practice
    ur monologue, cuz u wanna earn ur own benefits n stack ur own cabbage
    But he doesnt realize that he's got more than the average
    female thats golddiggin, naw... he's got the full package
    Instead he finds wayz to beat u down and clash with
    u on subjects that shouldnt even matter
    ur just a lonely girl tryna make it up the ladder
    so u figure if u roll with a pimp itll happen, but u got it all backwards
    ur minds just a lil flipped, but the talent you've mastered
    so I say drop him as quick as u can and after
    u find urself, do ur thing and leave them [email protected]@rds
    alone. Let em see ur mind before ur beauty
    cuz a lot men only want one thing and thats the booty
    but if u cant find that, then theres one last option- move to me
    I can make u happy...
     
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    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    NICE DROP!

    Loved the urban imagery in this and the paradox of the female charachter, she was indeed living kinda double minded ...huh?
    But this was a grabber...keep working at it!

    BLESSINGS ON YA HOUSE!
     
  3. Nita

    Nita Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Mmmmmm

    I see the way you watch her
    and it shows how much you care
    but why lQQk from a distance
    When you should be standing there
    Right by her side
    Your heart don't hide
    no shame but Pride
    if you fail
    least you tried
    and in the end that's what counts....

    so if you ask me you see,
    the only options in my sight
    is for you to walk into her life
    and make all the wrong stuff right

    Lovin ya floE
    :heart:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    str8 tyte drop flow on
     
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    i see you got da mack all laid out huh? :)
    this was tyte...tell her da deal
    one love
    khasm
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was the true essence of your message here
    ...flow on sister, this was tyte
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    More to the sister than just outer beauty, look within, this had a nice easy flow to it, keep writing.
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Gurl ya skur me sometime with the way ya say what ya say lol :)
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh my goodness :)
    nice drop sis
    loving your flow
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
  10. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks yall

    Nita- I feel u, Im working on it.

    Triniti- why u say that? lol if u dont mind explainin...
     
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