Black Poetry : it was a good thang

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by deepy, Jul 8, 2004.

  1. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    It was a good thing, while it lasted
    a nice space, while it was
    had some nice times, while we held on

    laughed through many summer dawns
    fussed lots...yelled too
    walked past weeping willows into groves of dew

    we saw starlites shining oer us
    felt firebombs in our chest
    screamed never l0 times over
    and came back to our rest

    -----this springtime some new breeze
    -----new root began to form
    -----so our lives intermingled
    other tunes
    other songs.

    It makes me sing now in my pillow
    and CRY OUT like a storm
    we've had good times and bad ones
    while it lasted..
    -----------now its........gone
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Kinda sounds like: "The love we had stays on my mind"...this is an awesome write. Very well done.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Stunning, this is, deepy. Much love for this one.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    my my how i feel u here gently it will all come anew !
     
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    Beautiful_by_me Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "-----this springtime some new breeze
    -----new root began to form
    -----so our lives intermingled
    other tunes
    other songs."


    :jumping: :jumping: :jumping: :jumping: :jumping: :jumping: :jumping:
    :flame: Can't stop repeating this..Can't stop repeating this :flame:
    Can't stop repeating this....and so on...and so on...

    Nice Drop...
    Peace​
     
  6. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice write and posed very well
    i really enjoyed this and feel ya on dis
    Peace
    Angel
     
  7. MADDRAPPER

    MADDRAPPER Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    deepy a nice script I enjoyed it bu tlet me drop a punchline up in here

    Some cats can’t love just a tainted scrub say what you
    Fainted on the rug? A joking hater is like a true
    Broken elevator your floors don’t exist so no crew
     
  8. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You flow images of nature so easily deepy. You have a smooth way of describing the sadness here.
     
  9. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sister...

    Your writing is so skillfull, it seems effortless for you...

    I loved every bit of this peace...


    Wonderful Scribe!
     
  10. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Beautiful writing:) I could totally relate in every line. a refreshhing read
     
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