Black Poetry : it just aint enough

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  1. NittyGrit

    NittyGrit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i'm her covering
    but when the rain starts pouring
    she holds my umbrella
    despite the mistakes and money i don't make
    she makes me proud
    to be regular

    lil ol' me
    nothing more than a work in progress
    blessed with the chance
    to live life holding hands
    with a princess
    ...wow
    she carries herself like a young lady now
    at only 7 years old
    she's getting used to her crown

    at 29 and some change
    i'm experiencing pain
    that makes me beg life
    to slow
    down

    our sundays end too soon
    and fridays don't come fast enough
    weekend visits leave me feeling empty
    i guess my heart has too much
    room
    the seven digits it takes
    to feel the phone on her face
    don't offer enough space
    for me to say
    baby...i miss u

    rotating every other week
    aint easy for me
    there is no need for the courts
    to put me on child support
    i give her my everything
    for free

    your honor
    my heart is her wound
    she is my bandage
    i know my daughter in detail
    like the fact that she's left handed
    i know she doesn't like cheese in her eggs
    plus she has a dimple in her left cheek
    that i kiss before she goes to bed
    as we hug and squeeze
    sleep tight

    last night i couldn't sleep
    because i had tears in my eyes
    the kind of tears
    that only a father would cry
    for his daughter

    growing pain
    is noticing you child is taller
    since the last time you saw her
    and realizing that all you have
    is everything you've offered

    fear
    is making that offer before a judge
    and him still ruling
    that every other weekend
    will have to be
    enough
     
  2. cherryblossom

    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    OH, my LAWD! I almost didn't make it thru this w/o crying!

    Even as I type this, I'm misting up!
    OH, MY LAWD! You made this so VERY REAL! I saw every scene and felt every emotion!

    And my feelings in reading it are so mixed! I'm sad for you and your daughter but happy as well. I ACHED for her AND for you. But, I also had a bit of joy just being given the chance to view such LOVE even in the midst of pain.


    I just wanna reach out and ((((HUG)))) YOU!


    THIS WAS INDESCRIBABLY POIGNANT AND INSPIRATIONAL!
     
  3. MRS. LADY

    MRS. LADY Banned MEMBER

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    Peace

    Br. NittyGrit:

    wherever enough meets everything .... this is more ....

    can actually feel how much u luv ur lil princess....

    u pen'd this on point...

    nuff respect
     
  4. 4EVERLUV

    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I did cry...

    This is a very touching and beautiful write.
    It made me think about my son and his baby girl.
    Nothing warms my heart more than to see them
    2 together. I felt your luv for your daughter in
    your every word. Just know that she luvs you
    as much as you luv her. Maybe one day it wont
    be every other weekend, just keep luving her
    in the mean time.



    Much Luv to you
     
  5. sarcasm4eva

    sarcasm4eva Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow, i feel the pain and im not a parent yet. it'll get better. round of applause goes to you for bein a real dad :) know in ur heart that ur daughter appreciates everything you do for her...keep ur head up
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :bowdown: To you and your's :bowdown:
     
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    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I felt this one soul deep. I almost weep cause i felt it just that deeply. Excellently write but imprortantly excellent father , know that your work is not in vain keep up the good fight
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow......heart felt
     
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