Black Poetry : It could be so simple(lauryn sd it best)

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  1. nfinite

    nfinite Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As the rain drops surges
    Certain urges became me
    A love respected became to be
    Nothing compare but a shame to me
    I became fixated on curiosity
    curious to explore you with all but simple dreams
    like the water dancing 4rm our skin
    but i got mixed in to a twisted luv affair it seems
    it's like when I am with you
    we're the only things there
    passion alarms me aware
    and i begin to give in
    as the rain drops surges thru my skin
    and certain urges transforms friends
    a love respected became again
    a shame to me and a victim to my deepest sin
    the thunder CLAPS
    or perhaps truth set in
    like reality
    the crazy fantazies
    of my mentality
    started to breathe in
    and urges became words
    and 4rm these words breathed ink to pen
    my pen my only saction
    to express such vivid emotions
    torn between two
    but for the moment i became you
    breathed you
    loved you
    D*mn!
    Nfinite Blessings
     
  2. nfinite

    nfinite Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm catching feelings!!!! Tell me what you think!
     
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    sho nuff feeling it too this was very well pose'd
     
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    realeyezrealize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Imagine
    gathered images form thoughts and then those when transformed into words
    written or verbal, take action, something happens. Is it by chance or do we grant emotions the openness to carry or toss us as waves through the ocean ? (Lauryn)
    When feelings received(or caught) deceive the the course of being patient, then one truely becomes "torn between two".
    " It seems" you allowed the twisting to take place, the face of your shame; fixated,curious,obsessed in the urges you possessed. Then reality snaps you back from your casualty, Now don't be made with me it's just an opinon.
    How came that great love respected you claim? (question) What lies beneath ?
    To me this poem either embaces lust or failed trust, explain lest I cause unintentional pain to what may be a reflection of something esle.
    None the less well written in content.
    P.S Plaese do not take offense, It was well written! just probing U
     
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    nfinite Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    much luv and respect