Black Poetry : It Ain't My Kid ("Y")

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Antar, Apr 6, 2004.

  1. Antar

    Antar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    can't really put all these pieces together
    doesn't really make sense
    we were together, where it really went
    clashes contestin
    smashing suggestions
    touches of love becoming
    feelings of smudge
    everythings gonna all work out
    but it's the opposite
    without a doubt how you shout it
    beggin me to be near you
    then tossin me away
    close as lovers lips to touch
    misplaced
    apart
    everday to start
    self destruction
    this is not your heart
    running me into the ground
    everytime we start
    get set, ready, on your mark
    so you sick with us
    you everything you pushin back to dust
    this too much
    gave you my heart while
    we was comin up
    whut 2 trust
    i'm goin to split a dutch
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i likes
    understanding this souldeep
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very well felt scribe here flow on let it out
     
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    Thinking all will be fine, and then suddenly you're wondering what happened? Keep flowing.
     
  5. river

    river Watch Her Flow MEMBER

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    I feel the dry ashes all the way through. That last line was the perfect ending. Deop some more!
     
  6. Antar

    Antar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you River, Watz, $$Rich$$, MzBlk so much for peepin my words and how i feel and the encouragement.
    thanks

    one,
    /antar
     
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    mistaliberator Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh boy

    antar you got what it takes
    i cant lie man this poem is too hot for net
    its real its truth its everything
    never meant to overlook you
    now i know so you have a fan
    keep the pen moving
     
  8. Antar

    Antar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thas propa mistaliberator
    glad you could check me out
    thanks for the support
    K.I.M (Keepin It Movin)

    one
    /antar
     
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    yo son...i hear you on this joint...
    ish like this makes you wanna pull out da bowl
    and lose control...word
    one love
    khasm
     
  10. Nita

    Nita Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yes

    Nice drop....felt the emotions
     
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