Quiet Poetry Lounge : Is There a Muse in This?

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by watzinaname, Feb 8, 2005.

  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I don't write with music playing,
    it normally interferes, but this mellow
    riff coerced me into scribing on the scroll
    within my mind. As I listened to the radio
    I closed my eyes, envisioning
    two dancers swaying slow
    in unison fervently following
    the snazzy syncopated flow
    the kind that
    you know
    makes you wince while
    murmuring, Umph,
    cause you know that man is
    playing the **** out of that horn
    blow baby blow
    I feel a subtle glow
    as I start gettin jiggy, jottin down lines right
    along with those imaginary dancers as we flow.
    By this time they must be gettin
    kinda tingly and warm
    drippin with sweat under the heat
    two bodies grooving into one form
    rhythmically releasing moving to the beat
    I put on my "dancing face", squeezing my
    already closed eyelids even tighter while
    smirking a wry smile,
    yeah, I enjoyed this vision. Releasing a sigh
    I watch my fictitious dancers fade to black
    returning to the back
    of my mind, waiting for their next cue.
    I don't write with music playing, I wonder
    what will happen when I do...
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That was really cute, try it with music and you might get to see the "tennesse watz" ...lol
    that was a fun read, I smiled as I read it. thanks
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice play on words, it was Sam Cooke that did a version of that song, wasn't it? Thank you for your response queent.
     
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    very soft sweet scribe had me wanna vent
    love the flow of this one sis....
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Glad to know you liked the flow in this Rich, thank you for your response to this piece.
     
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    This had a jazzy vibe to it. I love poems like that. nice .
     
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    That is very correct Watz, it was indeed Sam Cooke. That song brings back so many fond memories ...I use to throw down on that song. ...lol
     
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    This was a very lovely piece. Im lovin it. Very nice flow. I sometimes write with music on so i can kinda realte to this. i really enjoyed reading this. :heart: :heart:
     
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    Thank you Prizefighter16, I was trying to portray a feel like that, I appreciate your response.
    Now that I've put my thinking cap on, yeah, that song was poppin queent. I remember my mother used to love that song so much. Thanks again.
    Glad you let me know you enjoyed it Eisha. I don't usually write with music playing, so this was a different experience for me. Thank you.
     
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