Black Poetry : is she woman...child...or less?

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  1. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When I asked for
    Directions
    I reckon
    She thought me
    Neglecting
    Or ill mannered
    For not acknowledging
    The depths of her
    Beauty
    Looking her best
    Every time
    Sunshine
    Caressed
    The ebony silk(ness)
    Of satin smooth skin
    And wind blown locks

    She was drop dead gorgeous

    And every man lusts for
    Nature’s offerings

    Was she
    Woman, child, or less

    She yelled
    Child(less)
    Obscenities
    And vulgarities
    To an absurdity
    Using a mastery
    Foreign to me

    When she noticed my
    Puzzlement
    At her attempts at
    Dozen(ry)
    She whispered
    Endearments
    That reeked of
    Sexual procurements
    Like those of
    Pros
    And
    Ho…Ho…Ho’s

    She was a
    Street corner tease
    Who vowed she could
    Please
    Even the coldest man
    With ease
    (But they say she’s only fifteen)

    Was she
    Woman, child, or less

    She wore
    Makeup to perfection
    Heads turning
    From every direction
    Flashing her
    Thong bikini panties
    It was a crime, G.
    But she just smiled
    As she looked at me

    I ran my eyes over
    That Hottie
    ALL THAT Luscious BODY
    On one so very young
    36…24…36
    and then some
    five feet ten
    with a four inch tongue
    (madd skillz, G.)

    D’ed up firm Breasts
    With ocean deep eyes
    And thighs
    That ran so high
    They’d make a brutha cry
    “Why…whY…WHY
    Did mother nature
    Inflict this temptation
    On me”

    Was she
    Woman, child, or less

    She was a child
    In the eyes of the wise

    For the uncouth and common
    She was a woman

    But, for the jealous lady
    Who envied her womanly charms
    She was less than the dirt
    She stood on

    Now, bruthaz
    I ask you

    Is she
    Woman, child, or less?
     
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    she was hot , bad
    and all but a mind
    yet so small
    hooked , ready
    the man kinda lady
    yet so young
    mental dumb
    less...........

    dis was off da hooked bruh
    wow!!! u took it to the table
    and laid out a map tyteeeeeeeeee!!
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was tight
    you laid this out...
    flow on
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    so many children...

    ...doing grownup things...thinking they be grown 'coz they can open their legs...but a split don't make them grown. THANKS for reading.
     
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    Is she 'woman, child or less ?

    very, very lost is what she is...
    good job on this one, it's something we see everyday
    keep scribing...I'll keep reading :D
     
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    A child losing her childhood all too soon. You brought this out in clear view, keep flowing.
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    if a child...

    is exposed to something long enough, they think its the norm. lost? maybe. but who allowed her to get off the beaten path?

    if one suffers...we all suffer.

    peace&manyblessings
     
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    i really like this...i liked the rhythm and the rhyme of it..
    and for me the surprise of it...cause i wasn't thinking about
    some young l5 year older...and when it came...and you made me see the many varieties of emotions ..i smiled...and said yeah
    thanks twas wonderful..
     
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