Black Poetry : ...Is She Innocent?...

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  1. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is not about me...its just somethin i ended up writing...
    if it offends you...i apologize in advance..enjoy


    Dear

    mommy, daddy
    when you read this I’ll be dead
    mommy, daddy
    should of listened to what I said
    mommy, daddy
    i’m writin this letter to you
    mommy, daddy
    this entire letter is the truth

    you’ve never even listened to me before
    focused on your life more than you adored
    me and my life and the problems I had
    who knew a 14-year-old girl could stress this bad?
    over and over I screamed for attention
    got straight A’s, played sports, had no intention
    of hurting or even terrifying your hearts
    my life spiraled down from a bitter start

    mommy, daddy
    as you read this I’m dead
    mommy,daddy
    did you listen to what I said?
    mommy, daddy
    I wrote this letter to you
    mommy, daddy
    everything I say is true

    i never did drugs to mess up my life
    i had to think of something to bring you strife
    i thought of shooting a gun into my head
    but then I was too scared to go on ahead
    so I thought of sex, yep I stayed pure
    i did it so you would see I was mature
    but now I see sex is the way out for me
    to get your attention especially
    to make you suffer, for child neglect
    i could tell from the start your love was less

    mommy, daddy
    are you glad I’m dead?
    mommy, daddy
    did you hear what I said?
    mommy, daddy
    this is because of you
    mommy, daddy
    every single word is true

    i started out havin sex about four times a week
    and then it escalated every single week
    i needed to feel loved and happy inside
    but little did I know, it would cause me to die
    you see a person I f*cked gave me a disease
    maybe you’ve heard of it, worse than HIV
    its called AIDS and its made me so sick
    my body feels degraded without remiss
    and I can’t turn back, cuz now I’m gone
    i could have been alive and yours alone
    but you ignored me and all I ever had
    so I decided to show you what I did have
    i’ve been draggin my feet for the past months
    and never did you ask if I was ok, not once
    so now you know that I’m not okay
    but I still don’t think you care anyway

    mommy, daddy
    i’m glad I’m dead
    mommy, daddy
    **** everything you said
    mommy, daddy
    this is all on you
    mommy, daddy
    my job is through….

    I wasn’t as innocent as you thought I was….
    that is...if you ever thought of me at all...


    Sincerely,
    Your Daughter
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh my God, oh my God....
    first I must stop the tears from my eyes...
    my insides feel like I've been shot by 7 :uzi: 's...
    I guess I need to thank you for writting this piece. it must make all parents think...not twice but over and over and over again....
    because there are so, so many children that really do suffer from lack of love.
    oh my God...
     
  3. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awwwwwww thanks so much...
     
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    dang..can someone say DEEP....

    wow this was deep...I had to get up & get a tissue :cry: ..gurl you had tears about to stream down my face from how real this flow is...I mean stuff like this happens every single day..without notice until of course..the worst has come...& by that time its too late...I felt this in my soul...got my heart in knotzZ! luv'd dis one
    HoLLa :heart:
    *_LYriCaL-pAsSioN_*
    flow on souljah...flow on :spinstar:
     
  5. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you so much for ya comments...
     
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    We may not personally know someone this had happened to, but just the fact that the odds are it happened to someone, is horrible to fathom. I felt the ache and sorrow in this well written piece.
     
  7. LovelyGoldenOne

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    wow my sister this was powerful and deep
    this was a great drop...and posed very well
    thanks for sharing this one
    Peace
    Angel
     
  9. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks so much mzblk...
     
  10. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i really don't know why i wrote this or where i got the concept...but maybe it can help someone or reach out to someone...i hope it touched u when u read it...
     
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