Black Poetry : Invisible

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  1. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You enter the room all smilez
    with an impression that last like milez
    I study your physique
    altho your soul is mystique
    Everything has moved to slow motion
    I am now a volcano with emotions ready to erupt, ready for explosion
    I love how your skin tone matches your shadow
    call it "so cliche" but the blacker the berry the sweeter the juice
    I love how your style goes deeper than your beauty or the price of your shoes
    I sit in the corner bumpin Common becuz has shown me "the light"
    You across from me eating fruit, I see the exotic beauty in ever bite
    I stare into your eyes while you stare off into the distance
    Im hoping, praying, needing you to look over to me and ask for assistance
    I love how your hair touches your backside and your backside touches the sky
    And I love how your cheeks form crevices everytime you smile and how I get a glimpse of heave when you look me in the eye
    But I, see I find composure, somehow I limit my behavior
    I love how your breast form like mountains and your stomach is in alignment with your navel
    You're talking with your friend- you might as well be singing
    And the sunlight is shining thru the windows, gleaming
    Im sittin her breathless, airless- you have become my lung cancer
    And to every ? I hold for god, Ive only gotten one answer
    You're an angel that has lost her way from heaven
    and you have brought me closer to than Ill ever be to perfection's presence
    But no matter how loud my hear pounds or how close we come in the physical
    when it comes to you seeing me... Ill always be invisible.
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you really went deep
    with this drop
    very nice flow poet
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    Aw, not always invisible, no way...I was feeling this flow.
     
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    Nice flow i am feeling it proper tings!...

    The detailing was so tight
    It took me to another height
    And let me have some insight
    To your minds delights!...

    One..xxx
     
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    that last line really got me

    Wow. Tight flow all the way down the page, and then that haunting line. Sweet drop.
     
  6. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks yall

    I had to get deep with this one, Im really feelin this ish, but ill manage. much love...
     
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    See now, I'm feeling this.
    This is something I like
    Very sweet and sincere
     
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    Nice scribe.
     
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    This is excellent as all of your work. This is a master peace of love. :heart:
     
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    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks yall.

    Ashanta- I would have to say the same about ur work. god bless...
     
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