Black Poetry : Invasion

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  1. Luver2B

    Luver2B Active Member MEMBER

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    Invasion

    Stranger, null from the first glare appeared addictive
    Lovely black woman with smooth skin,
    Beautiful braids, desirable body, elegant walk
    Nothing unknown to me,
    Nothing from which wanting was to spawn
    For many with your traits had enter my world
    And left me undisturbed
    Then came ‘Shaw’
    In a goddess like state you came
    Never had my eyes witness such grace
    Step after step you created poetry
    With your hips, shoulders, hands
    Sexiness poured out of you
    In awe I stayed
    Paralyzed by this phenomenon, by you
    My soul you had invaded
    Confusion, want, turmoil, lust
    You brought me
    Cause I could not make you mine.
     
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    this was felt within and deep
     
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    Such a tangled web of emotions, I liked the way you flowed with this.
     
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    Very well written

    Invasion

    Stranger, null from the first glare appeared addictive
    Lovely black woman with smooth skin,
    Beautiful braids, desirable body, elegant walk
    Nothing unknown to me,
    Nothing from which wanting was to spawn
    For many with your traits had enter my world
    And left me undisturbed
    Then came ‘Shaw’
    In a goddess like state you came
    Never had my eyes witness such grace
    Step after step you created poetry
    With your hips, shoulders, hands
    Sexiness poured out of you
    In awe I stayed
    Paralyzed by this phenomenon, by you
    My soul you had invaded
    Confusion, want, turmoil, lust
    You brought me
    Cause I could not make you mine.[/QUOTE]
     
  5. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As I read this...it had a sense of urgency and an Intensifying emotion...
    steadily building...then I got to the above stanza...and it was like lava...
    it hit my soul with the quickness...Whoa...

    Loving your craft... :sand: Encore...
     
  6. monad.poetress

    monad.poetress Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This poem was fascinating
    Beautiful...Beautiful...Beautiful :luvv:

    Monad.poetress
     
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