Black Poetry : Intrusion

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  1. Amun-Ra

    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Floressa,
    my countessa
    the world is dark
    and the sun is cold
    when your eyes turn away.

    I remember
    it was December
    when love broke hard
    ice cracking beneath hurt.

    Inside kill
    against your will
    rough hands torn privacy
    intruded, bruised and broken.

    Abused
    thoroughly used
    your eyes can't find mine
    and they barely see yourself.

    Be no fear
    for I am here
    with firm shoulder support
    and reckless understanding.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    dis be it!

    Ra... man ya came wit it big tyme:toast:
    lean on me!!
     
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    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A pillar

    for one who had their self removed forceably--Ra
     
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    and a very sad thang!

    one whom forces shell
    not rest ..........
     
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    thoroughly

    mixed emotions throughout....there was/is such a pleasing rhythm in this most disturbing rhyme. Had to go away and come back to this again....and acknowledge my respect for the way you employ your skill while telling some of life's ugliest tales.

    thank you

    a
     
  6. Amun-Ra

    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is an ugly story

    Truly an ugly story but nevertheless aslics of someone's life that I know and stillspend a lot of time with--doesn't make any sense does it?

    Ra

    :(
     
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    poetry and pain
    often the twain
    needed to be sain

    understandin the need to flow from the soul
     
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    Heartbeat Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "...here with reckless understanding" Say that Ra!

    BE
     
  9. Amun-Ra

    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This story!

    This story is one that is told too often--too **** often--Ra

    :(
     
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    Bert Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is very heavy, brotha

    and deeply felt.

    BRB