Black Poetry : Intoxicated My Entity

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  1. Prizefighter16

    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey guys i titled it intoxicated my entity...but im not sure about that title, so if yall can help a sistah out wit some suggestions...i would really appreciate it...peace....1

    INTOXICATED MY ENTITY

    Never has a man
    captivated my essence
    just to brighten my life
    with the thought of his presence

    Nor had I ever found someone
    who I could wrap my spirit ,
    and still be free.
    with love…New Love
    filling the whole of me

    to intoxicate my entity

    want to eat, sleep, and live, his grace
    get joyful inside by the smile of his face
    captivated by the power in the strength of this king
    proud of the wisdom his character brings

    the sound of his voice
    can weaken my knees
    he’s deep like the rivers
    and cool like the breeze

    A sigh from my heart
    is a sign of the pleasure
    when I think of how him and I are together

    I feared for myself, and letting all go
    But the more I am with him, my character grows
    Now I wish to be held in the comfort of his being
    Passion for his spirit is what I am feeling

    This has never happened
    Am I losing my grip
    so enticed to have his name roll off of my lips
    and his lips…can I bear
    to have it voice my name
    always making me a princess
    his thoughts give me fame,

    every day I’m surprised by the sound of his tone
    don't know why he loves me
    and me alone

    kinda uneasy
    can’t help it
    Keep it to myself
    cuz I didn’t kno why I felt it
    Yet this, love grasps me like a tingle up my spine
    Im glad that I am his
    and he is mine.

    at times I get nervous
    and want to slow down
    so high up in the clouds
    that I couldn’t see the ground

    But I kno this is right
    so I’ll go with the stream
    Lay down close my eyes
    this still aint a dream
    This love
    soul mate
    is mine
    it seems

    and no longer
    should I
    question this love
    this gift from my saviour
    the creator above

    for it has taken my entity
    it has completed
    the whole of me…
     
  2. Wisdom7

    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Great poem, I think the title is fine! :D
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    what u have here is tyte and all good yo title is fine sis.
     
  4. Prizefighter16

    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you Wisdom and Rich...for reading and commenting on the poetry...i very much appreciate it....

    and i guess i should keep the title the same...thanks yall


    Peace and Bless

    Mz.Soull aka prizefighter16
     
  5. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    this poem is hot, i hope they deserve you, and they are giving you their all
    because you deserve it
    the title is fine

    the poem is fire


    DSS
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sounds like the love has taken you over, and cast a spell upon your heart and soul. I think the title captures the feel of the piece.
     
  7. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Isn't love a beautiful piece. Love that poem, by the way keep the title
     
  8. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i like the title...this was a beautiful poem...
     
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    re:Entity

    This is a very beautiful poem with a lot of inspirational verse.
     
  10. Prizefighter16

    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks yall...

    Da Street So'ja thanks for readin my poem poet..., im glad u think its fire...and yeah he deserves me...lol :cool:

    bless....keep the flow goin

    watzinaname thanks for givin insght on how the title fits the poem...i really just took a line from the work and titled it...but i see how it fits....

    bless...keep the flow goin

    Defiantson thanks for readin the poem:read: :read: ...glad u liked it...yeah love is a beautiful piece in and of itself.....

    bless keep the flow goin

    LovelyGoldenOne Thanks sis...for likin the title...and diggin the poem...really appreciate that

    Poetrymama yeah this poem was very much inspired...thanks for readin and commenting...

    :jump: Thank all yall for takin time out...it helps me become a better poet, i promise u that...


    Word from Mz.Soull aka prizefighter16
    :cool: :jump:
     
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