Black Poetry : ...INTENSE...

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  1. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    these thoughts are
    rushin'
    sushin'
    gushin'
    all inside my head
    my head is
    spinnin'
    wheelin'
    bendin'
    to stay sane in my head
    my life is
    windin'
    whirlin'
    twistin'
    just wish i was in bed
    the truth is
    me wantin'
    lovin'
    teasin'
    with sickness as my friend


    i live my life inside and out
    to keep from being stung
    i try to bring the best about
    but instead i still get stung
    the ones i went to as my friends
    have left me out to freeze
    the ones i shunned away intense
    have come to resurrect me


    these words are
    rushin'
    wheelin'
    windin'
    my thoughts are so intense
    my body is
    thrashin'
    lashin'
    crashin'
    as it tries to make out sense
    this poem is
    spinnin'
    feelin'
    twistin'
    and puttin' me past immense
    all i feel is
    pen
    no grin
    no pretend
    my mind is at pretense


    please don't pretend you like me
    when you hate me more than life
    don't smile your fake *** grins at me
    and keep on goin' to live your life
    don't make it seem like your my friend
    when your glad i'm in grueling pain
    most of all don't even go and pretend
    that you've never had any dark rain


    intense is my feelin'
    disturbed is my healin'
    immense is my lovin'
    pretense in my holdin'
    my life is my nestin'
    my God does the testin'
    my lover is my feelin'
    I AM MY OWN HEALIN'....
     
  2. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    just felt the need to write this...and again nobody probably understands it...but i just have to get my feelin's out...
    and for those of you that don't know and read this...i have cancer...and well...i have alot of pain...some of its more mental than physical...
     
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    I feel you ridin' that whirlwind...
    wrestling down order in chaos...
    Peace to you LGO!!!
     
  4. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks skrybe...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    bless ya heart i know where u coming form and
    da pain u must feel mentally ur alwayz in my prayers
    sistah the struggling moments of thoughts cover u at time
    but the sun shine through it as well
    remember u can lean on me anytime anyday !
    stay strong !
     
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    feel your flow....
    your in prayers...
    love you girl...
     
  7. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks all of your are so sweet...
    ola ur words really touched me...
    and rich my big brother:)...its good to know i can lean on you
    mzblk thanks for your nice words...

    ~Lovely~
     
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    actually I do feel you, Lovely. but I wish I could give you a hug instead. much love to you.
     
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    I wish I could say that I know exacly how you feel and in some ways I am sure I do because without knowing spcifics I felt the intense fire and chilling Ice of this peice. I may have never flown a jet plane but I have seen and I know what it feels like to break the surley bonds of earth and peirce the sky- or something like that! (lol)
    very moving peice
     
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    "my life is my nestin'
    my God does the testin'
    my lover is my feelin'
    I AM MY OWN HEALIN'...."

    no one can make you feel as good as YOU can:)
     
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