Black Poetry : Insomniac?

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  1. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    lately, i been walking
    and talking to the long green sofa
    chatting with it as I try to rest by
    tired body...
    it doesn't answer back

    the cats seem to think
    it's playtime and there feet
    rattle and scurry through
    the place...sometimes
    knocking over the plant
    when they forget they are
    suppose to be able to jump and move
    like cats are suppose to
    the sound of the tv echoes through
    the rooms...announcing for the
    29th time the red sox won, deion is a raven
    the williams sisters, tiger growls..
    the sofa still is silent.

    my mind is like the sofa's tongue
    blank...
    the computer keys pounds
    i try to discover some interesting
    new fact..or enlighten myself
    reading the paper..

    sensuality .. sex doesn't seem
    to exist in my being..void of
    feeling...
    tired..and yet
    sleep does not come


    at four AM it's like 1 in the afternoon
    and sleep stays away
    doesn't want to play
    the radio beats out hiphop or Mozart
    Bird or Marley...I dance..
    still the sofa is silent
    and sleep does not come
    I scream for it
    it does not come
    will not come
    and the sofa
    looks at me and is
    silent



    (c)deepy/ncn 2004
     
  2. MrBlak

    MrBlak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Great poem....I know about losing your mind when not being able to sleep.....pacing about like you are crazy and trying to find anything to occupy the dead time. You put nicely in poetic form what a handfull of us on destee suffer nightly!!
     
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    oh i know this so well..nice poem here described it to a tea for me..
    thanks for sharing....Angel
     
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    Loved the way you used the sofa in this piece, you looking at it, it looking back at you signifying, nothing....Such a creative way to speak on the trials of insomnia. I wish a good night's sleep for you poet.
     
  5. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    thanks familee...i knew i wasn't the only one in here moving in that void
    and watz...that's why the question mark...cause some nights..no problem, and others... it's about that sofa--thanks for the wish
     
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    This is the bomb, deepy. Well stated, great flow, nice metaphors. I live in this place of troubled sleep too, so I feel you.
     
  7. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    thanks gempis...for your support and comments...tis the comments that i learn and grow from...
    appreciate it..
     
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    interesting...i like this...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sho nuff know what u mean sistah , sometime i be dat way
     
  10. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    lovely golden one...glad it sparked your interest
    and $rich...i know you be that way sometimes...i just know it... thanks...
     
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