Black Poetry : Inner Turmoil

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by NDeep, Sep 3, 2003.

  1. NDeep

    NDeep Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It's inner turmoil, when I look into those eyes
    Those beautiful brown eyes, that I fell for first
    When I don't get the same vibe, it feels worse
    To not know if you're masking the feelings
    That I know you once had, or if your
    Simply no longer feeling my flow
    My magnetic, floetic imagry. The inner turmoil
    Has my thoughts puzzling, my heart...
    Well...my heart fervently beats when you look at me
    See...no I can't see. I don't know. That's
    The inner turmoil flooding the gate of my brain
    Drowning my visions of you and I
    Choaking the chances of you and I
    Killing the feelings in you and in I
    Inner turmoil replacing newborn passion
    But who's to blame for this hectic situation?
    Me or you, you and I, Fate
    Perhaps, makes for an interesting debate
    I'd rather meditate, metacognate, and relate
    This inner turmoil in a twenty line poem.
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    like the flow of this..
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    NDeep i felt this scribe here
    the turmoil of the inner
    mental thoughts

    let it flow out .....let it run
     
  4. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    OMG! I can relate to this sooo much, u just put my feelings on destee. nice flow, keep em comin...
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WOW....NDeep...u had me on dis one :)
     
  6. true love

    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    such imagery of a relationship choking, dayum, this was tight.
     
  7. LURK

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    nice scribe poet...im definately feelin this vibe...may i???.............

    "2 eyes with one view
    why love is soo krul(lurk)
    i try and try 4 you
    and if i have to,i'll die 4 you....
    girl,i get high from you
    kiss the sky 4 you
    but you don't wanna hear me....soooo
    now im tellin lies to you...
    hell we all despize
    sooo i realize heaven is you...
    thru those angel eyes
    i see the reflecting view
    of me neglecting you
    and puttin' you
    thru and thru our problems..this
    is why i think i should give up
    i know i'm wrong
    plus i started this...
    so y not finish this
    i feel....its hard to keep it real..
    so i grab a pad,pen get lifted....(puff puff)
    sit back..and think of everything thats missin'...........


    in my life without you.........
    now its just one eye with one view...." LuRk 1
     
  8. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Feelin this - specially, "when I don't get the same vibe, it gets worse." Nice flow.
     
  9. NDeep

    NDeep Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Love the support guys...Thanx
     
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