Black Poetry : Initial Instincts

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by howardtsu, May 21, 2007.

  1. howardtsu

    howardtsu Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    prologue :

    a single phone call can change a guy's life ... or possibly send it into a tailspin

    the day he finds out her swell grin

    never fails to begin

    the moment her favorite Blue Whale walks in :



    but i thought he was your brother and the two of you were just talking

    about subjects innocent enough that could have you easily balking at the very thought of a romantic encounter

    how did he zero your counter?

    i thought our Atlantic was the only counter you'd ever choose to prepare your meals

    how did his sails sweep you away

    when you swore his deals weren't enticing enough to get you to pay

    for his cake no matter how delicious his icing tastes to listen to

    i thought i was your true

    soulmate

    sweetheart



    love,

    howard
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    what a twist of love ....very nice drop
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thinking you love was true, only to find there's someone new. Howard, the way you structured this piece was very creative and effective.
     
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    howardtsu Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks $$rich$$ :em3600:

    thanks watzinaname :wave:
     
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