Black Poetry : ~Inevitable: A Small Stream~

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  1. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Our foundation was put
    into a bottle and thrown
    into the Mississippi...
    both hoping somehow it's
    journey will reach a destiny...
    Nine years we spent
    loving each other, though
    at times I played behind
    a false heart...

    There were once seeds
    planted inside of you...
    along with the lies
    you consumed...
    Ignorant to the pain I caused
    I guess you had the right to...
    kill our future...

    I often dream of the times
    when we would play...
    under the honeysuckle shade...
    You'd dare to walk brimstone
    just to show me the way...
    to a heavens gate...
    but only you could
    be my god...somebody
    I could actually see...
    touch and smell...
    for a crying river, this is
    the perfect song...

    Our promises are off floating
    in the father of waters...
    along with twains adventures...
    soaked in this nation's history
    and ours is coming to an end
    so it seems...

    Understand that love
    is something I fear...
    not the hollow tips
    that pierced my chest...
    nor my blood that stained
    your soft hands...
    but saying, "i love you" and
    living up to it...

    I cant reach for things
    out in the galaxy...
    just to prove exactly
    what I mean...
    and i'm not climbing
    the highest peaks...
    I can make love to
    you all night...
    and you can search
    through my eyes...
    while our bodies
    become one...
    and you'll never find
    a sign of my
    love...

    I'm sorry
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very warm and acceptable to a heart of love
    worthy note to reverse the inevitable...........
    flow on
     
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    I enjoyed this remarkable poem. You should take a full amount of pride in this effort.
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    whoa...

    you are a sight for sore eyes...

    I've always enjoyed reading you and this poem...*sigh* this poem...
    gleams with a duality of beauty and painful reality...
    sometimes there is compatibility to some degree
    but that "tko" kinda love just isn't there...

    the metaphors in this piece...blew me away...
    particularly the ones I quoted in bold
    I wasn't expecting...the "unexpected" ending but whoa
    it's so beautiful...even with the unhappy ending

    wow...I swimmed deeply in this flow

    Encore poet...this was a diamond amidst sand and stone!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This piece was laden with such descriptive verse, and there was also a "face the facts" edge to it, that made this piece different. Well written art poet, do flow on.
     
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    Mind~$oul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for showing love peoples
     
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    AHMOSE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome back

    A breath of fresh air with this piece thank you for sharing.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Phenomenal piece......wow.

    It's great to read you again. :D
     
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