Black Poetry : indigopoem: release.

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  1. elayne.

    elayne. Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    for Benita...

    recently/ it was brought to my attention that i/ just maybe/ haven’t really told you goodbye.
    that i/ sometimes speak of you/ as if you’re still alive… my sisterfriendconfidante/ sharer of
    all dreams/ self-appointed protector of me/ & my extrasacred things… that nobody knew
    about but you. we used to sing/ two-part harmony womansongs of growin’ old & gettin’
    grown/ as we came into our own/ uniquely individual “queenthings” together. therefore/ it’s
    been somewhat difficult/ letting you go…

    initially/ i was angry/ stubbornly refusing/ to embrace the possibility that/ you could actually
    be taken away from me… (only 2 months before you’d turn 33). & for the longest time it
    seemed/ friendships just weren’t what they usta be/ life just wasn’t how it was ‘sposed to
    be/ since you were no longer around...

    but/ i have painfully come to realize/ been lovingly persuaded to internalize/ that you were
    never truly mine… to keep. & in the grand scheme of things/ everything is how it was
    planned to be/ from the very moment/ either one of us was conceived. in other words/ the
    predestined time of your departure/ was bigger than… both you & me.

    i’ve arrived at the point in my life/ for tossing bouquets & running thru rice. never once/
    did i envision special times/ & in my mind/ see no you… by my side. it’s no longer my
    desire to question/ why you had to leave/ i am merely accepting. gently releasing. &
    although this earth will forever be/ devoid of your beautiful physical energy/ you will
    irreversibly abide with me… in cherished heartmade memories. your sweetsweet spirit will
    always be/ surrounding me in serene supplication… leading/guiding/comforting… until we
    meet again.

    i won’t lie & say/ that as the years go by/ i’ll never cry… for you. what i will say/ is that
    …on those sad&lonely days/ after the tears subside/ i’ll look towards heaven & anticipate
    the sun’s shine. & when it does… i’ll be reminded of your smile/ & the fact that/ all you
    ever wanted was for me to be happy. so/ ‘til next time/ give my daddy a kiss for me… &
    be… always(at)peace.



    © SunShyneOrygynals 2002, all rights reserved.
     
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    oh my goodness........
    when i saw that nobody had responded to this i was going to come in here and hot and holler about how i was the first one to respond.............and then i read this...............

    this is simply amazing. the most beautiful poem i have ever heard i feel the emotion in this peice as if i had written it for one of my dear friends who is gone away........never before have i wanted to cry after reading a poem.......but this..........this just toched me

    i would quote a line or two but it just wouldnt give the rest of the poem justice

    you simply amazed me with this peice

    poems like this inspire me and for that i thank u elayne.


    ..........WOW............
     
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    Elayne........whoa ! sis i feel dis so deep and it cut like a blade
    coz i still yet ready to say goodbye to my son.
     
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    alwaysthanks.


    lp. thank you! thank you! thank you! for putting
    my heart&mind at ease about even posting this peace.
    whether you know it or not... You have touched Me... &
    i will be forever grateful to you for that. :)

    (thanks... again. for sharing my bittersweet release)

    itsallLove, chile.

    rich. you slipped your response in on me while i
    was thankin' lp! :) but... i want you to remember...
    there is NO time table on when you have to let go.
    take your time!! don't let anyone tell you to
    "get over it"... altho' i don't think Anyone would be
    that unfeeling. (if they are... let me know!!) as for
    me... it was time & i chose this peace as my way of
    setting Benita's beautiful spirit free... she & i both
    deserve release. thank you for always caring!!

    itsallLove, chile.
     
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    Thank u for ya lovin ways da mind & spirit is free
    taking my tyme as it goes by.......nothing but luv!
     
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    i read this last night while we were on the phone...i chose to save my words until this morning, when i had time to think about the peace...

    i feel somewhat uncomfortable trying to comment on this poem, because the sentiment speaks for itself, and it does not warrant any stylistic critique...in other words, i'm not sure what to say...other than i am glad that you have finally began to deal with the loss of benita...when we talked about it, i didn't think you would try to deal with it so suddenly, but maybe that was for the best...nevertheless, just know that, somewhere, benita is happy with the fact that you are finally making peace with her departure...

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    This is one of those pieces that so many of us can relate to and we thank you the poet who speaks for so many of us and helps us to know that we are not alone.
    know that you are not alone either

    Thank you for sharing
     
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    rich. just keep remembering... the one who
    has the broken heart is the only one who knows
    what it will take to heal. go slow... :heart:
    poeticmensah. you don't really have to say
    a thing, sweetie... i know where your heart is...
    ...i know you know how i feel.. & i just appreciate
    you being there. thank you.
    shazzy. thank you for re-affirming for me
    that i am not alone. me & you... we're gonna be
    just fine, my friend!! :)

    itsallLove, chirens.
     
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    elayne...you are magnificent. You's a bad mamajama.

    10,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000 x pi

    this is beautiful

    verb
     
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    garrison. a bad mamajama?? :lol: thanks
    for the response... & the laugh! both are truly
    appreciated. (i liked the magnificent part. :D )

    itsallLove, chile.
     
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