Black Poetry : indigopoem: breathe.

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by elayne., Nov 4, 2002.

  1. elayne.

    elayne. Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i wonder in silent solitude
    about the multitude of ways
    that you… single-handedly
    manage to move me…
    …more than likely
    without even trying…

    & each time you leave me
    i gather up all of the
    ethereal traces you’ve left
    lying around in our space
    & place them in a suitcase
    of memories that i keep
    underneath our bed…
    on the side where you sleep

    & when the mood caresses me
    (which is usually daily)
    i venture inside…
    with heart open w i d e &
    permit your essence to
    permeate the room
    & saturate my senses
    to such an intense extent that…
    i breathe you & become high
    i breathe you in & we arrive
    simultaneous-ly
    time after time… then…

    i lie in the midst of
    gentle reminiscences
    satiated from inhaling…
    your smiles…
    your sounds…
    your scent… & all these things
    paint the walls of my mind
    with perfect pictures &
    sentimental scribes of you&i
    in happy & serene times…

    & i wonder if you realize how
    you move me… when…
    i breathe you & become renewed
    i breathe you in…
    & as my lungs gently expand
    i remember to exhale… slow…

    …until i’m once again
    afforded the chance…
    to breathe love (back) into you.



    © Nefertiti Days 2002, all rights reserved.
     
  2. mensahpoetic

    mensahpoetic Active Member MEMBER

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    why you biting off of me?? :D

    nah seriously, i thoroughly enjoyed this piece, though when you told me about it, i thought you were going to flip your style a little bit...still love it, but just letting you know what i was thinking about this...

    you know i'm no good with replies, but umm...I really love you...and the feelings expressed in this indigopoem are more than mutual...:love:

    peace pumpkin :)
     
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    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sigh... oh, y'alls love is so sweet...
    thanks for sharin and showin it here.... -7:spinstar:
     
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    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    what can i say.

    :)


    tps
     
  5. elayne.

    elayne. Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    alwaysthanks.


    poeticmensah. biting off you? well... imitation is the
    highest form of flattery... at least that's what they say...
    but i'ont know! :lol: thanks for responding even though
    you're no good at it... i love you back... endless-ly!
    seven. do you know how much i've grown to
    appreciate you?? tremendous-ly. thank you!! :)
    seany. you ain't got ta say nothin'... your presence
    here is more than enuf!! (where you been??!)
    sherrie. ummm... er-uh... yep... that's what he said
    alright. :lol: thank you... & you know why!! :wink:

    itsallLove, chirens.
     
  6. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    its crazy cause i feel the same way

    i dont know how you do it but you seem to move me in every line you write, i love your work more and more every time you post something new. like i always tell you even when i'm not writting i come in here and read some of your stuff. its just something about the way you write

    like the quote said

    "what can i say"

    wonderful poem like always
    LP
     
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    Oh My ****!!!!!

    Elayne,

    I've been poppin' in and out of here and evidently I missed this masterpiece, this 10, this work of Elayne-art!!!!

    I really dig how you embrace that love thang!!!!

    Truly gifted beyond words... :toast:

    I love reading you my dear MEB!!!! (RT)

    :heart:
    GQ
     
  8. elayne.

    elayne. Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    alwaysthanks.


    lp. you got me smilin' sooo BIG ova here!!
    sorta like this... :D (LOL) i really appreciate you
    'cause from the moment you entered the house...
    you've always shown me love, love & mo' Love.
    thanks... a million times!!
    bighead. you know what i always say 'bout
    you... "betta late than neva!" i'm happy that you
    enjoyed my "elayne-art" (you're so clever!!). you
    know i be needin' you around!! (that's RT)

    itsallLove, chirens!!
     
  9. UbZoRbShUn

    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    finally

    gots nothing to say other than i enjoyed the entire feel of this but me and Truitt are diggin this part:

    ***you shinin girl***


    LilBit
     
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    Shower

    This is Ab(so)l(u)tely Brill!!! You know it's somethin when you get Shun & Truitt ta goin...lol well maybe not they kinda nasty newayz... but it was still good!

    Rock On Supastar...
    Reas
     
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