Black Poetry : Indian Summer - visions of venus

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  1. Legendof_1_Spirit

    Legendof_1_Spirit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It is today
    the day after yesterday
    the day before tomorrow
    and I see with new sight
    as if I had lived blind
    and today for the first time
    my eyes have been opened

    an epiphany revealed
    like a beacon of light
    a lighthouse shining bright
    through-right thru the storms
    of my life

    and the clouds of despair
    dissipate floating away
    in tattered fragments of
    past disappointments
    headaches and smouldering
    heartbreaks that leave me
    free completely and in a state
    of dissolving aftershocks

    the last gasp of breath
    pulled from my chest
    wrenched from my lungs
    and fading with the final
    remnants of past earthquakes

    today I hold my breath no longer
    I breathe deeply and inhale
    and fall into the sweet intoxication
    of a new spring that blooms
    behind your smile
    my sun
    that melted the winter frowns
    and evaporated the icy tears
    from my eyes

    I exhale and embrace your touch
    and feel beautiful and new
    like a work of art exposed
    at last to the public eye
    beyond critical critique
    beyond comparison totally unique
    your fingers call my name
    and whisper reassurance

    ...<I am here with you for you
    you are the end of my search
    the beginning of a new universe
    yesterday’s history of separation
    and loss and rejection is now
    our colloquy of acceptance
    our soliloquy of togetherness
    the magnetism of our souls
    locked in collapsing orbits
    merge into a tomorrow of one-ness>...

    My skin cooled and soothed
    by your hands answer

    ...<you are my eve
    my venus
    my athena
    my empress of light
    that God pulled from my
    broken rib of life
    and reshaped into my perfect
    counterpart
    my comforter through the dark
    endless night of bygone days
    that strip away my sanity
    and my faith>...

    Today I can see
    and though I have suffered long
    I understand that the past
    prepared me for you
    is what made me and
    the heartbreaks has finally shown me
    that love
    true love complete and unconditional
    suffers long
    bears all things
    believes all things
    endures all things
    and through it
    inspite of our flaws
    we are perfect in love.
     
  2. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    unspeakable beauty

    when my soul is restless in the midnight season, I know where to come....

    this is righteous flow, Legend...

    inspite of our flaws
    we are perfect in love


    now I can rest.


    thank you

    alyce
     
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    brotherman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Believe me, if alyce feels you, you are indeed felt. Nice nice most nicely scribed.
     
  4. Legendof_1_Spirit

    Legendof_1_Spirit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ...>fades in>

    Alyce, glad you liked my latest jumble of words. Thanks for the response, I'm glad it touched you.


    Brotherman, thank you also for reading and taking the time to respond.

    <fades out<...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow!!! u well put it together lovin ya spray.......
     
  6. GQ

    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Legend,

    This is extra my dawg!!!

    Thoroughly enjoyed the read!!!

    :peace:
    GQ
     
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    the magnetism of our souls
    locked in collapsing orbits
    merge into a tomorrow of one-ness


    magnetism.....collapsing orbits!
    Oooh! i like!
    I was thinking of a similar concept just today, but the power of your image took it to a whole 'nother level. :wink:
     
  8. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "I understand that the past prepared me for you"..awesome!

    this is beauty...in words, in imagery, in meaning....

    pure love..how sweet the taste..

    K
     
  9. Legendof_1_Spirit

    Legendof_1_Spirit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ...>floats in>

    Once again thanks for taking the time to read and respond to my poem.

    Kitana- glad you like that line, it is one of my favorites as well. Often times our past prepares us for an even brighter future.

    Deepgrrl-don't let my expression stop you from exploring your concept or interrupt your thoughts. Chances are you will see or express it in a way that will open a whole new corridor or thought. Glad you liked my expression.

    GQ-I am really glad you enjoyed the read man.

    Rich-thanks, for a second I did not know how this poem would end, but once I started it wrote itself.

    <floats out<...
     
  10. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Legend.


    how the hell... did you almost let me sleep on this???

    sometimes you gotta pull a sistah's coattail & let her
    know that something extraordinari-ly beautiful awaits
    if she would just rush right on ova to the board!! :)

    i am in love... with this piece. thank you for sharing it.
    (when you final-ly materialize... you do the **** thang!!) :D

    :heart:
    Elayne.
     
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