Black Poetry : Incline

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Climbing up the mountain
    didn't come here to stay...
    Many of you probably remember
    that hymn, that we used to sing on Sunday

    Well I've been thinking about climbing up
    a mountain lately
    and the difficulty of each upward trek,
    varies greatly

    When I started climbing up this particular
    mountain, I wore a comfortable walking shoe
    Kids used to call them "bobos" or [brand] Xs
    But the price was right, so I figured they'd do

    The smoothly paved road was steep
    I grew so weary and tired
    I broke out into a big old sweat
    I believe only dainty women perspire
    But I digress...

    The smooth surface I'd been walking on
    turned into a cobbled road
    Seems like I stubbed my toe every other step
    Swollen feet caused my sneaks to nearly explode

    Suddenly the wear and tear on my shoes
    just plain wore out
    The holes fought the material, and the holes won
    Now shoeless, I discovered what pain was really about
    Taking a deep breath my...

    feet immediately began to get cold and chafed
    The road then turned from cobbled stone, to dirt
    My dogs were covered with grit and grime
    And those little pebbles, boy did they hurt
    And I grimaced

    Then that dirt road morphed into a little bridge
    with frayed rope cables, and rotted wood
    Good thing my splintered feet could still jump
    when that bridge buckled I leaped as far as I could
    I gasped as reached the other side

    Beneath my feet next...
    burning hot coals, I had to sprint across this time
    A piece of skin stuck to each fiery rock,
    Feet on fire, how could I possibly complete this climb?
    As the coals finally cooled, I moaned and sobbed

    I thought nothing could be worse, but it can
    always be, hadn't I already learned?
    Before me laid a bed of nails...being constantly cut...
    far worse than being occasionally burned

    No progression in remaining in that spot
    With each gigantic step I took, another blister would pop
    As those rusty nails sliced and punctured my flesh
    I screamed, asking God if this hellish trail would ever stop
    I collapsed from the pain, thinking surely this was the end...

    When I awakened, I found the same smoothly paved
    mountain road I'd originally encountered, and I was glad
    Yes, some roads will be steep, but upward treks tend to be
    To have to complete that treacherous journey...how sad
    It took leaps, bounds, flames, and blood curdling pain
    to finally realize the solid ground I already had

    So, I'll just continue walking up this mountain in my "bobos"...
    After all, life is a series of upward treks, isn't it?
     
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    and sometimes downward treks too

    thanks for the ride here sista Watz

    so eloquent
     
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    Wow! Sis Watz! This was an awesome display of our never-ending upward battles...and then hindsight...only to realize that we were on smooth ground all along! Unfortunately, sometimes the choices we make takes us down those rough roads. Great write poetess!
     
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    Downward too, but then again, that's another poem. Thank you for the luv brotha So'ja.
    We don't miss our water til... Yes, those choices, LovesDestiny, we can just kick ourselves sometimes for those choices made. Thank you sis.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    U really amaze me sometime ....love this display and journey
     
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    Really? You humble me Rich, thank you for that gracious response.
     
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    thanks for the renewal in this piece watz
    no matter what we go thru
    we will have God on our side.........
     
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    Yes, we certainly do have God on our side nevar, thank you.
     
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    You are so talented sister Watz, and I always enjoy and get something out of what you write......
     
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    I am right there with ya Sis Watz
     
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