Black Poetry : In your eyes

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  1. Lataisha Nicole

    Lataisha Nicole Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    YOUR EYES

    I WISH I COULD SEE MYSELF
    THE WAY THAT YOU DO
    I WISH THAT I COULD BORROW YOUR EYES
    SOMETIMES
    SO THAT I COULD SEE THROUGH
    SO EASY IT SEEMS FOR YOU TO SEE
    THE BEST IN ME
    I ALMOST OBJECT
    BECAUSE I SOMETIMES FEEL
    THAT WHAT IT IS YOU'RE SEEING IS NOT REAL
    I MEAN HONESTLY YOU DON'T SEE
    JUST HOW BROKEN I AM
    INSIDE
    HOW OTTER EXPRESSIONS IS LIKE LIE
    ITS AS IF YOU SEE ME AS WHOLE
    AND I'M ALMOST INCLINED TO BELIEVE YOU
    BUT IT FEELS SO MUCH LIKE DECEIT
    THAT YOU DON'T RECOGNIZE
    MY DEFEAT
    YOU SAID IT, YOU SEE IT
    THE ONLY THING HOLDING ME DOWN IS ME
    IT'S SO OBVIOUS THAT THE BONE CRUSHER
    IS INVISIBLE FOR THE NAKED EYE TO SEE
    HOW HE STRADDLES ME
    TAKING SLOWLY
    SEEPING IS MY LIFE
    AWAY LEAVING
    AND WHAT YOU SEE AS STRENGTH
    IS ME BARELY BREATHING
    THE DEMONS THAT USED TO HIDE UNDER MY BED
    I KNOW NOW WERE NOT JUST FIGMENTS OF MY IMAGINATION
    THE DEMONS ARE JUST SYMBOLIC
    OF THE FORCES THAT CAUSES MY HESITATION
    BREAKING ME DOWN SLOWLY
    THE REASONS THAT I LEARNED TO PRAY
    BUT YOU ARE SO STRONG
    IS WHAT THEY ALL SAY
    THEY CAN'T RECOGNIZE THE MASK
    CONSTANTLY I'M TRYING NOT TO REVEAL
    THE PAINFUL SECRETS
    OF MY PAST
    INADEQUATE, AFRAID, FAT AND UGLY
    NEVER REALLY QUITE GOOD ENOUGH
    BROKEN, ALWAYS WANTING,ALWAYS NEEDING
    ALWAYS ON A CONSTANT SEARCH
    FOR LOVE
    LOVING MEN WHILE HATING MEN
    A CAPTIVE
    A PRISONER
    OF MY FATHERS SINS
    AND SO, THE REAL STORY BEGINS
    BUT I'VE BEEN TOLD
    THAT THERE IS NO ONE TO BLAME
    BUT WHAT TO DO
    WITH ALL OF THE GUILT AND SHAME
    OF BEING AN ABANDONED LITTLE GIRL
    USED AND ABUSED JUST LEFT TO FEND FOR SELF
    IN A GREAT BIG CRUEL WORLD
    WHERE EVERYBODY
    IS SOOO WRONG
    BUT THEY'LL JUST SAY
    NOW YOU'RE GROWN
    AND ISN'T SHE STRONG
    AND AS THE YEARS GO BY
    THE LAYERS OF MY MASK
    GETS THICKER AND THICKER
    AS I QUESTION THEN SLOWLY FORGET
    HOW TO LOVE
    AS I THROW OUT NOTIONS THAT ANYONE IS WORTHY
    TRUST WORTHY
    AND SURELY IT IS MY HEART THAT WILL SUFFER BECAUSE
    I CAN NO LONGER TRUST MYSELF
    HOW AMAZING YOU SEE
    SOOO MUCH GOOD IN ME
    YOU SEE MY AMBITIONS AND MAKE ME BELIEVE
    THAT I COULD ACTUALLY ACHIEVE
    BUT YOU DO UNDERSTAND
    THAT THE ULTIMATE ACCOMPLISHMENT
    WON'T COME WITH AWARDS OR PLAGUES
    OR MONEY IN A BANK
    A BIG HOUSE AND A BIG CADILLAC
    MY SUCCESS MY ULTIMATE SUCCESS
    WOULD BE AN END TO WHAT I HAVE ALWAYS BEEN IN SEARCH OF
    REAL LOVE
    SOMEONE TO TAKE MY HAND AND PULL ME UP OFF OF THE STEPS
    SOMEONE ACTUALLY LISTENING TO HEAR
    MY S.O.S FOR HELP
    BECAUSE SLUMPED DOWN FOLDED ON A FLOOR IN A CLOSET
    IS ME
    STRONG, BIG, LITTLE, OLD,
    ME
    WANTING, JUST WAITING TO GET FREE
    NEEDING SO DESPERATELY FOR SOMEONE TO JUST RECOGNIZE
    THE DISGUISE
    AND SOMETIMES I WISH THAT I COULD ACTUALLY JUST
    BORROW YOUR EYES
    BECAUSE MAYBE, JUST MAYBE THAT WOULD NOT REFLECT
    THAT CHILD TRAPPED WITHIN, A LOST OF INNOCENCE
    A LIFE, SOAKED FILLED WITH REGRET
    A PROMISE THAT HAS YET TO BE FULFILLED
    AND SURLY I'VE BEEN DREAMING UP TIL NOW
    FOR IT ALL JUST SEEMS SO SURREAL
    AND ONE FOOT IN FRONT OF THE OTHER
    AND TODAY TURNING INTO TOMORROW
    DOESN'T CONSTITUTE STRENGTH
    MOVING, JUST MOVING, I AM IN MOTION
    AND OVER MY SHOULDER I FIND
    THAT IT WAS ALL JUST TIME
    AND I HAVE LEFT NOTHING
    BEHIND
    I AM REAL AND I DO FEEL
    ALL THE PAIN THAT LIVES INSIDE
    AND SOMETIMES JUST SOMETIMES
    I REALLY DO WISH THAT It WERE POSSIBLE
    TO SEE ME
    THROUGH YOUR EYES

    LATAISHA NICOLE
     
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    welcome to da poetic playground of destee.com
    wow through another eyez one see thee , this was sweet and well done
    look to read more of you soon....again welcome within da family
     
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    This is a powerful flow

    Welcome to Destee


    " HOW AMAZING YOU SEE
    SOOO MUCH GOOD IN ME
    YOU SEE MY AMBITIONS AND MAKE ME BELIEVE
    THAT I COULD ACTUALLY ACHIEVE "

    Your ears are hearing the whispers from one. That says you can.
     
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    WHOA....that was pain.

    Your ink bleeds words that are fatal...

    - Chi
     
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    I could feel the angst in your words, I think others see strength in us that we don't think we have any more. We're thinking, gee, if they only knew. Such a well written piece.
    Welcome to Destee.com. Please aquaint yourself with our Poetic Etiquette, and please, make yourself at home! Looking forward to reading more.
     
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    welcome to DESTEE.COM

    writing is remedial

    let it ALL out

    i saw you in the other eyes reflection

    you have nothing to be shamed of

    living is learning

    and not letting other do your living for you

    and i can't see that happening with you

    a person with your obvious strength

    peace poet
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Lataisha Nicole:
    I have read this piece several times and
    did not post a comment because it touched
    me in so many ways. First I want to tell you
    that you are a great writer and 2nd.....
    YOU ARE BEAUTIFUL no matter what others
    make think or feel YOU are in control of YOU.
    My heart ached for you as I read your piece
    but I also rejoiced for you because I am
    sure writing this piece was not easy but you did.
    YOU can over come ANYTHING . Stay strong and BELIEVE in
    YOU.

    Much Luv
     
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    LovesDestiny Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WOW Nicole!!!!!

    I am in complete AWE! Ghurl you got skills!!! I agree with Sister 4EverLuv!!

    This write is deep and intricate in its depiction of seeing yourself through someone else's eyes! I can't even go into detail on everything I see! I was blessed by this piece Nicole!

    Thank you!!!
     
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    In my eyes this was a materpiece. I too read this serveal times without leaving a comment but I could not leave this time without letting you know how much you have touched me on today.
     
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    Lataisha Nicole Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for the love every one , there's nothing more gratifying then knowing, that others appreciate and like what you do. Give thanks to the most high, cause if everyone could do it then everyone would do it, took me a long time to recognize that poetry was a spiritual gift, intended to change the world, somehow, blessings and thanks to everyone.
     
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