Black Poetry : In Too Deep

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  1. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As I watch myself,
    I try to stop myself.
    I’ve been this way already.
    My heart I try to hold it steady,
    Cause I know it’s not ready,
    To be let down again.
    I’ve seen this part of my life before,
    And it left me trying to escape,
    Through a window or an open door,
    Not even trying to wait,
    Around to see if there was more.

    As I feel myself,
    I try to reel myself,
    Back into reality,
    And out of this fantasy mind frame.
    Thinking that you would remember my face,
    That you would even remember my name.
    How wrong was I…
    My hopes were too high.
    But can I say that when they dropped,
    They became fortified?
    I beg to deny…
    But at least I can identify,
    When I’m in too deep…
    Maybe just in time to save,
    You….
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I think it's a very smart person to know when things are too deep...mainly when ...been there, done that. nice scribe...keep pushing the pen.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    speak on i feel ya here
    nice write
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When one feels something that the other never will, that's in too deep. Keep your flows coming.
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    like the song says
    you have to know
    when to fold'em
    and when to walk away...
    but sometimes
    we're in too deep...

    tyte scribe
     
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    sister i love ....



    i feld sister..


    i feld sister ....


    maybe youre already long here ....



    but welcome... :grouphug:


    i love to read from you more... :kiss:








    Lovelibertylady:heart:
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice drop.....
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice drop sister.
     
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    i enjoyed this poem very much and can definitely identify. it took me down to that 'deep' place we never want to visit, but then your strength brought me back up again...bravo
     
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    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I thank you all for your love....it's the fire that gives me the desire to go higher in poetry. I think that in some part of our lives, we all can relate to this piece. I wrote this while I actually felt myself getting too deep. But now I can say that I'm safe on land...instead of drowning in that sea. Sometimes when you write your flow...it becomes even more clear to you...and you begin to take heed...





    I can feel you, feeling me, poetically....don't stop.
     
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