Black Poetry : IN THE GARDEN OF EDEN

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  1. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    In the Garden of Eden
    When crime took place
    The forbidden happened and changed the human race
    Things opened up
    The sky turned all dark
    There was lighting, and thunder and rain poured of course

    At that time I believe God not only spoke to his man.
    He walked and they talked all the time
    God held mans hand:kick:

    Then one day he gave him a mate to be with
    She was perfect
    So lovely
    Everything was correct

    Again I say
    Something happened that day
    I won’t buy into the notion it was her like they say

    What ever it was
    We were not there
    Bible stories misconstrued to mislead us astray


    :boring:

    This is what I have always thought
    I can’t get the idea out my head
    So I am going to share an idea I have had for some time

    It is why Man chases love and he sometimes never finds.

    It is about why a woman loves so much but can’t keep the fire
    That she is given to hold ( It is love ) like during the initial desire
    The desire she stirs in a man is so hard to keep hot
    It is fruitless sometimes she wears her self out

    What happened was the perfection of a woman and all of her attributes split
    Spread across into many others so sometimes she never seems
    complete within herself or seem like she fit

    So she tries to please many

    Hoping she has what he likes

    Buys some different parts and pieces if she lacks in the fight
    Like hair, makeup, breast and things
    These things don’t make her bad
    They just add to her reason to scream, and they sometimes make her sad

    Why can’t I be accepted the way I am?

    In reality you are

    Just keep searching, don’t struggle or change you will find the right ( man ) star.

    Who loves your breast
    Your hair and the rest
    Your eyes, your curves, your lips and your ways

    In the garden Man was split
    He searches but can’t find
    His perfect Mate he once knew

    Inside it is a burn
    A long lessen he seems to never learn
    He tries to conquer during his life

    So he runs thru the entire woman population:run:
    Seeming never to settle for one
    Looking for his perfect life

    Not knowing confusion is his curse:confused:

    If he slowed down get to know each one he dates
    He can gather what he needs to recognize worth

    So when Love comes calling You Man
    Slow down

    A Woman is the perfect mate:angel1:
    It doesn’t matter if she has the biggest
    The longest
    Hair and breast isn’t all
    She has in store

    Slow down get to know who you keep time with once more

    Now ladies you have to be patient with us
    Maybe we blew up the garden back in Eden :bomb:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I really enjoyed your spin on this poet. Yes, confusion can be a curse, and not realizing the jewel that you are, can be a curse as well. Tight write.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    man u out did yaself on this joint ....wow HODEE
     
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    uppin dis one back whewwww
     
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    WORD!


    This piece reminded me of an old adage: "My child, long may you live and short may you tarry, but mind whom you mate with and whom you marry."

    Those are words to live by for men and women.
     
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