Black Poetry : ....in the Basement

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  1. Harry Hyman

    Harry Hyman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ...In the Basement


    I've seen Fear on the face of men in war,
    that wide-eyed riveted gaze.
    On mine in front of a foe with a gun
    who intended to extinquish my days.
    But nothing would ever prepare me
    for this tale I'm compulsed to present
    'bout hauling wet clothes to a dryer
    downstairs in my buddy's basement.

    First the lights went out. I dropped the load.
    The basement silence held two sounds
    like knives slicing air in the distance
    and thudding feet walking soft ground.
    I lunged for the stairway in darkness
    but the Thing scraped my ribcage so !
    At the top of the stairs, I could just see the door,
    only seven steps to go.
    Its breath singed the hairs on the back of my neck.
    I jumped two steps, leaving five.
    I bounded two more and that left me three
    with the Monster on my heels and alive.
    I lunged for the door, ope' and closed it.
    All in one motion I did !
    It snarled and pounded and pounded.
    My escape must have blown its lid.

    Each pounding lifted me off the door.
    Cracked wood pieces propelled to the floor.
    Ejected like bullets were door hinge screws.
    Wood began crumbling.
    It was coming through !
    I shivered and sweated in silent fright.
    Awaiting the crash ! Awaiting the fight !
    Then suddenly ! All went silent !
    And again my ears heard the sound.
    Knifeclaws, slicing air in the distance,
    started fading and melting, going down.
    The breath returned to my body
    and the sweat began to dry.
    Why it stopped? I'll never know.
    I'm lucky and I won't ask why !

    When I told my vacationing buddy,
    he chuckled and said I was crazed.
    But I saw him back home from vacation today
    with his "wide-eyed riveted gaze."
    So, don't laugh at anyone saying,
    "There's a Monster in your basement, my friend."
    You can bet your sweet life, I would never forget it
    or ever chuckle again !

    Namyh
     
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    *Reminding myself, not to take a trip to the basement...no time soon:lol:
    I enjoyed the read poet!
     
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    Whew!!! So glad I don't even own a basement.....I hope all that racket was your friends raggity washin' machine......lol!
     
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    dat's da basement u say .....i'm gonna stay upstairs tyte read sir. poet
     
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    Queentswana - If you hear light scratching at the door of the basement. Yikes! Don’t go down there unless armed, like me, with a short bazooka, grenades, survival knife, 3 land mines and a cold Sprite….unstirred and unshaken, of course. Thanks Queentswana. So glad you enjoyed Namyh
     
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    you sure this was the basement

    could have sworn i saw duke wrecking havoc on the ave last night

    very descriptive HH

    you have talent man

    but i know i didn't have to tell you that lol

    this played like a pilot soon to come to UPN:welldone:
     
  7. Harry Hyman

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    Mizjoice - Not exactly! Most of it was my knees knocking, teeth chattering, static electricity making the hair stand up along with the screaming of course. And yes, the washing machine was noisy too but it wasn’t even plugged in. That still makes me shake! Thanks Mizjoice for the “Whew”. Namyh
     
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    You certainly ain't got ta tell me twice :lol:
     
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    Rich -It’s okay to stay upstairs Rich but it knows where you are. And remember, if it creeps quietly, it probably eats loudly. And if you find it has eyes in the back of its head, don’t stand behind it.! Ha!Ha!Ha!Ha! Thanks Rich. Glad you enjoyed. Namyh

    So’ja – They were wrecking havoc on the avenue because they were trying to catch the Thing that escaped from the basement. Oh Yeah! The pilot starts in 3 weeks and you’re in it.(LOL). Thanks for the compliments and thanks for your enjoyment. Namyh
     
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    Certainly nothing to chuckle about, I won't be going into anyone's basement anytime soon. You know just how to tell a tale to keep the readers engrossed, and make us feel like flies on the walls.
     
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