Black Poetry : In the aftermath

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by islander, Sep 23, 2004.

  1. islander

    islander Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    In the aftermath...
    I lie here...chest still heaving...
    Back still in arched position...
    And thighs still trembling in spread eagle invitation...waiting for your company
    Sweat boils from my skin when I'm reminiscent of what has proven to be the best wrestling match of this century

    My mental and physical schema is in anticipatory function for your...
    Goatee and tongue travelling in unison to gather the leftovers from the best cooked meal of your life
    The excitement of your tongue graciously inserted between labia shows the depths of your hunger and the limits of my endurance
    My lips silently implore you to eat until you are full...
    Drink until you are no longer thirsty...or until the cup is empty

    Ecstasy spilled within our immediate vicinities calls your senses into action...
    To eagerly dig into my earth your seeds of enjoyment
    The submission of my skin to yours quickly breeds sporadic, yet, pleasurable eruptions...
    Originating in the base of my spine...
    Slowly travelling to the depths of my belly...
    And stampeding out in disorderly fashion...
    While you smile slyly upon observing the loss of my control

    I be the button and you be the finger on the remote...
    Cruising the channels by which my means of communication are elevated or lowered in volume
    I don't know exactly what you were trying to do...but consider it done
    As I lie here in the static created by the friction of you walking across my imagination...in the aftermath

    Copyrighted 2004
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sister, not only was this spicy, but painstakingly so. You chiseled your words into our minds like a sculptor. Wonderfully posed poet. Flow on.
     
  3. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    **** this was incredible when it came to the imagery. Painted the picture perfectly with your words. The structure was kinda off though just a lil bit...with the long then short lines....I ENJOYED THE READ though.

    one luv
     
  4. islander

    islander Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for the love watzinaname and the advice mind~soul. I respect anyone that can offer subtle advice and props at the same time. I appreciate both of you.
     
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    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i enjoyed this read, the imagery was hot. do your thang sista...well done
     
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    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    whoa...this ish blew my mind...
    this was like watching a movie...very visual
    scribe on poet...
    one love
    khasm
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    all snap this was whewwwwwwwwwwwwwww!!!!!!!!
    awesome drop
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :hot: ...poet this was HOT

    flame on...I'm loving it
    Sage
     
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