Black Poetry : ...In Other Words

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  1. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the language always fails

    even her best attempts
    to convey how he moves
    the wind around
    in the attic where her
    dreams are born….

    return void…

    the blending of sounds, the marriage
    of consonants and vowels, the formation
    of mono/multi-syllable words, accents,
    punctuation

    still fall short
    of who he is
    how/
    what he does in that
    space between
    her temples


    inside her house
    there is another stirring;
    evidence of
    open gates,
    embers glowing warmly upon
    her hearth,
    doors ajar

    no forceable entry ~

    no strangers here...

    but there is no adequate way
    for her to say

    he is the key...


    Alyce (c) 2001
     
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    Destee destee.com STAFF

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    who needs words with a picture this clear?

    beautiful Alyce
     
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    MsDLite Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ...yes, ma'am!

    ...and i quote:

    even her best attempts
    to convey how he moves
    the wind around
    in the attic where her
    dreams are born...

    return void...


    i know you know what you just said there!
    uh huh! yeah!

    talk sis!
     
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    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Of course, the head--that space between the ears--no B&E necessary--the door is open--I liked this--this is where it all starts--a picture for any writer to view--Ra
     
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    Sweet A, I can see clearly now!!! A poetess and an artist.....Its no wonder that I treasure you as a queen....
     
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    Hey Alyce

    tight flow girl!
     
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    Bert Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    love the way you talk about that woman in the attic.


    Bert
     
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    wonderful word arrangement. big up!
     
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    Sista Alyce.


    ...how the hell did i miss this??? &
    how the hell do you always write the
    words of my heart??? :)

    this is spectacular poetry!!
    (but you already knew dat ****! :lol: )

    :heart:
    Elayne.
     
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    Alyce
    I must give you ten hand claps for this one gurl !

    Poetic
     
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