Black Poetry : In Full View

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  1. skuderjaymes

    skuderjaymes Contextualizer Synthesizer MEMBER

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    There he sits
    In full view,
    Bowed in Humility
    Dipped and drip-dried
    Of his pride.
    Humanely Humiliated,
    In full view,
    His Humanity illuminated,
    And for a fraction of a fraction of a microsecond,
    I catch myself
    Wanting to fill his need—
    Had I the power.
    I wonder out loud,
    “what would it be?"
    Cliché like; love Unconditional?
    Or simply,
    A better pair of shoes and
    A warm place to lay his head?.
    Maybe a nice hot bath?,
    To see mother again?
    Riches?, B****es?,
    Hot sex on a platter?,
    To strut and step like Goldy The Mac?,
    Or a soothing caress from the
    Woman he loves?
    Could it be world peace?
    Or maybe a mountain of crack
    Cocaine and a swimming pool
    Filled with cognac?
    Or a nice warm meal?
    Revenge?
    A truckload of menthol cigarettes?,
    To fill his yearn for
    Wide-eyed innocence or
    To renew his dignity?
    Heal his pride?
    Or maybe a job?
    Yeah that’s it, a Job!
    Or maybe a turbo charged space cruiser?
    As I made my way across the pavement he answered with
    “Good morning brother"
    "Good Morning," I said.
     
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    that distant look one gets...

    when meditating on the painful, sometimes cries out to the casual observer. you've captured this. THANK YOU.
     
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    wow you captured that nanosecond of a moment that we've all shared with the less fortunate. I loved how you took the time to acknowledge that which most never see or simply ignore
     
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    this a path a view that many turn there head from
     
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    I think it was
    that pierced me the hardest
    because it seems such an emotionally accurate appropriation
    at least you speak and acknowledge them
    because they are still people even if society has turned their backs on em
    I enjoy the subtle sharpness of this piece brotha
    much props poet :) :read: :)
     
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    i really enjoyed reading this i enjoy reading you for your poetry has a way of making me think...
     
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    Brother Poet Skuderjaymes,

    Wonderful! I love that you not only humanized the homeless man but the main subject as well. He running a litany of ideas through his mind on how he could possibly help a man he perceived to be less fortunate. Perhaps not realizing all the things he'd offer where the very things the homeless man may have shun to be free and at peace; until the homeless man asked him for nothing, only offered a warm greeting. I loved the brother to brother warmth they shared. Lovely piece of art.
     
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    Thank you very much.. I'm happy to see that some of the elements I was trying to preserve still come across.
    This was the first piece I ever performed live.. I like the swings.. the randomness of the list of things.. and the
    peacefulness of the resolution.. I wrote this at a time when I felt like the world was literally speaking to me..
    I felt so completely tuned-in to everything around me.. It was a wonderful feeling.. and I produced some of my
    favorite pieces during that time.
     
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