Black Poetry : In Exchange

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by WindWalker, Feb 17, 2002.

  1. WindWalker

    WindWalker Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    IN EXCHANGE
    Thumbs in suspenders; smug, log-hard face,
    the old logger stands, and from the edge of his time
    surveys a clearing of bleeding stumps: his handiwork.
    On surrounding hills, torn patches of earth's sagging face
    leave him unmoved, his attitude unchanged.

    With the cold eye of the predator, he calculates the worth
    of one remaining tree at the far edge of the clearing--
    a fleeting life, struggling alone, needles falling silently
    as tears from an orphan in the path of someone else's war...

    He hefts the chainsaw to take this last life,
    but as suddenly falls dead in his own killing fields,
    his heart giving out, tired of the noise, the killing:
    another wasted life in a wasteland of its own making.

    Among the wreckage, in an evening’s freshening breeze,
    the logger's son falls to his knees, weeps silently,
    his tears, long held back, fall freely on this broken land:
    are they for the father lying dead at the morgue--
    or for himself, now able to see the works of greed?

    In fading shadows, his haunted space comes alive:
    he hears his mother’s voice and unheeded advice:
    "Never take any life for foolish pleasure or greed, son.
    Take but what you need with constant gratitude
    for such is understood and permitted.
    In exchange learn to give of yourself also."
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well said .....well written ......... well heard.......da walks of da wind

    flow on poet flow !
     
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    MADDRAPPER Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hey yo that was ill for real enjoyed that you bought the trees to life in a professio

    hey yo that was ill for real enjoyed that you bought the trees to life in a professional manner loving this and the flow but I'm sorry about the cat dying doe for real
     
  4. Legendof_1_Spirit

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    <condenses into a solid and falls like rain>

    This is awesome, and very different. I don't recall ever reading any of your work here before, but then again I just stop in every now and then on a whim, so my visits are sometimes far between. But I really enjoyed this piece. It is refreshing and deals with subject matter not often touched upon, especially during or near-after valentines day, when no one never really takes the time to think about the trees or even the flowers that they rush to buy.
    Thanks for the reminder which is so well written and heartfelt.

    Keep the words moving my friend.

    <evaporates>
     
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    Nicely spoken
    Tis was a very nice drop poet
    Much Love on this
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What impressed me the most about this piece was the intricate description in each line. Well written flow.
     
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    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was a nice piece enjoyed the flow, flow on poet
     
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    Desert Storm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yes, it's better to give than recieve... feeling this really good piece.... i see wisdom abounding this work... blessings :) D.S.
     
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