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Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by watzinaname, Jul 5, 2007.

  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The written word can
    often be misconstrued
    Oh how I try to expound
    and exude
    What stirs in my
    heart and in my mind
    So when I am read,
    my essence is left behind

    When I speak of the fruits
    of a love complete
    If you bite into that strawberry
    does it really taste sweet?
    Describing how your aura
    merges into my own
    Can you feel the sudden surge
    of feathery touches shown?

    Whilst emotions brim and spill
    over into written flow
    Can you see every hue of the rainbow
    that shimmers in the afterglow?
    And when I sing that sonnet
    specifically noted just for you
    Are you able to hear the glorious tune
    as the melody just plays on through?

    There's so much
    I've tried to say
    I hope my words
    actually help to convey
    what I feel, instead of
    merely getting in the way
    Seems like you don't understand,
    although you should know by now
    I'll write my heart as long
    as my pen will allow
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    what seem not heard or felt is
    and when one misunderstand
    usely ova-stood
     
  3. truetothecause

    truetothecause Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    SIS Watz,
    I really love it when and that, I see myself...in the reflection of YOU....
    I mean, it's like your Essence manages to still shines through...
    and it alse seems to be really true....
    that I can see Me in You...
    Destee, QueenT, Yemoja'sG
    and you...SmoothsouL, Lilpea, Sha'iyn and $$Rich$$,
    that goes forScry'be & Da So'ja on da Street!..Goddess Auset, Sleep, and Oldsoul too,
    and for all you other poets, whose names escape me.....
    yet you who all continue to embrace me......
    that part of me which becomes the WE....
    that point where our passions meets.....it is there where the energy just can't get defeat.....
    cause it really about....
    WATZ ~IN ~A ~NAME! ...
    :qqb014: :juggle::qqb015:
     
  4. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Being ova-stood brings the understanding to such a high level, thank you Rich.
    Sister true2...whew. Your love for your people, radiates so strongly. I feel that warm presence about you while in the chatroom, and I read it, above, in your words. I think I can speak for us all when I say, a most humble, thank you, for we see ourselves within you as well. :)
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    watz:
    You are so very talented. Write after write
    your pen is stronger and stronger. Always flowing
    so beautifully, lovingly, and deeply. Your gift is
    amazing.


    Much Luv
     
  6. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am quite humbled by your response to this piece, poetess. Thanks a million 4Everluv.
     
  7. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    yes

    keepin' writin' my sista

    no the words won't get in the way

    and i like strawberries!


    peace
     
  8. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh, you like strawberries, So'ja? Lol, I'll keep on writing, brotha, thank you.
     
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    sweet apple*pie Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Your descriptive imagery is so colorful....I really love colorful pieces like this.:spinstar:
     
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    daroc Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    IM REALLY LIKING THIS...

    AND I CAN TASTE THOSE STRAWBERRIES TOO....LOL.
     
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