Poetry Critiques : (In) between two friends

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  1. moham

    moham Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    He told me she broke his heart.
    His only family in this hostile foreign country.
    No family, no friends, no permit, no job, but he… he didn’t care because he had her.
    She, was all he needed. Is what all he needs.

    She was not afraid to be alone anymore. She had to go her own way.
    This relationship only was no longer enough for her stay.
    Since the age of fifteen she had been taking care of two, it was time now to take care
    of her own and do the things she wanted to do.

    It has been enough, she sadly told me.
    He could only smile whenever I was around.
     
  2. moham

    moham Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ...and another one

    :heart:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was nice and could be the art of a great short story !
     
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    re: In between

    Very nice write.
     
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    In the mix... betwixt ~ reconciliation.

    Do your thing poet!


    :cardio:
     
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