Black Poetry : In A Room Full Of Nothing!

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  1. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    In a room full of nothing!

    Empty bed.
    Quiet phone.
    Cold oven.
    She's home all alone.

    No breeze.
    No sneeze.
    pleeez!
    That man is gone.

    There she sits in her room all alone.
    A room full of nothing and a heart
    filled with less.

    A room full of nothing can leave an ugly mess.
    Naked hangers on his side of the closet.
    You wondering when and where you had lost it.

    This room used to jump with passion and fire,
    when we were the object of each others desire.
    The same size bed that much is true.
    It just seems some how bigger, cause it's not holding you.

    ump!umph!umph!
    We used to be something.
    But what we got now is a room full of nothing!

    bjs(c)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    SOMETYME

    WE FINE SELF IN THIS MESS
    AFTER DA LOVE HAS GONE ....I FEEL YA ON DIS
     
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    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    a room full of nothing, is a cold place to be...

    and colder still when all it holds is sad memories of what used to be...

    K
     
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    I love the rhythm

    of this piece....I love the imagery, the feelings you evoke in me. The realization that, yes, we used to be something... room used to be jumping....but for reasons known & perhaps unknown....now it ain't about nothing.

    I like the way you told this one, msluciousb. It's real.
    thank you

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    visuals from top to bottom. Well done Poet

    BE
     
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