Black Poetry : In a Ball

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    In a ball
    Is where these thoughts almost ended
    In a wad of paper thrown in a pile
    with other false starts discarded, yet amended

    But I decided to open up this ball
    and allow it to breathe
    Before the verses began to crowd
    my cluttered mind, and seethe

    So much can be tied up into a ball
    Though it didn't start that way,
    At first a piece of string, a linear thought,
    one phrase, a millisecond of a 24 hour day

    Then that single line builds, and grows,
    and cyphers intertwining into a big old ball...
    As I curl up into a ball atop this bed, I look at life
    all circular like that, thinking about it all

    As I watch the mental images flicker
    Adoring eyes peer down at the wee angelic face
    Newborn swaddled in a cradle of warm
    protective arms, sweetly buffered in a sacred space

    Children having a ball
    Just learning how to catch one
    Giddy ice cream faces, running spirited races
    Chasing bubbles and butterflies, all in a days fun

    Young love blushes and blooms, blossoming
    into a ring of forever presented to wed
    Life time lovers pampering and caressing
    cuddled up in a ball, spooning in bed

    And all the while, each morning the sun
    illuminates, exhaling energy with it's light
    When it sets the moon is in it's misty glory
    softly beaming through the night

    And I, in this ball on my bed, try to inhale
    all these precious images from days gone by
    Trying to immerse myself when my heart,
    my mind, my soul, can't even cry...
    Any more

    And it all cycles back to the beginning
    For in the end, if I only could
    be held in an adoring cradle of warmth
    Gee, that would feel so good
    I sigh as I curl up even tighter
    In a ball
     
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    mistaliberator Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    warm

    it can feel this peace its dynamically correct and the images you painted i could relate to this poem touches the soul in the form of remebrance in the cycle of things flow on speak on write on kkep on poet
     
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    Whoaa... That was a trip. Such vivid but tranquil imagery. Well written and powerful, heartstring-plucking themes ("Newborn swaddled in a cradle of warm protective arms, sweetly buffered in a sacred space").

    Thank you for giving life through words. Thank you so much...

    One.

    ~Ikoro
     
  4. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Mistaliberator, I appreciate you commenting on how the cycle of things in this piece touches the soul. Thanks a million poet.
    Giving life through words, Ikoro? I try, and it is I who thanks you, humbly.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow watz u really open up a whole new meaning as i too felt the depth
    of this piece and the power of such mission statement made flow on sista poetress
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you Rich for saying that you could feel the depths as well, appreciated.
     
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    Begin Your Circle

    Even as we see the Around and around shapes out side
    It's also our mind
    Mine and your's Sis
    That have taken
    In motion, the constant sphere
    the earth is round
    So as we should be
    Everything is conducted through the ball
    Sight, smell, Speaking, and Listen
    But its our job to Decipher it all the Different
    find your Circumference
    Control the dribble of the thoughts in your head
    When peace in found.....
    It wont be you that rolls
    but it that Flows
    Around, and Around, Around, and Around, And Around.......
    Filling you like a Ball of Complete Joy...:hearts2:
     
  8. miko

    miko New Member MEMBER

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    I love the imagery of this piece.

    I also really like the first one. I also have a fondness for reading poems that tell a coherent story.

    (Nice Work)
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Platinum, I really love your flow in response. Yes, let that circle of joy cycle around the both of us. Thanks a million.
    Thank you so much miko, for your kindness. Much appreciated.
     
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