Black Poetry : imperfect " aquikthought"

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  1. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am so imperfect
    like a round square...
    a sashaying brooke who's
    water doesn't chime along the rocks
    ...tree leaves who haven't experienced
    a fall breeze...

    I am so imperfect
    like straight nappy hair
    a cloud that can't hang
    a child that can't play
    a sun with no day

    I am so imperfect that
    I can hurt you without
    thinking...without trying...
    so much that I hurt myself.

    (c)2004 blakverb "a quik thought"
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    another deep feeling poem and i so feel your vibe....much love to you

    miss you too.....Angel
     
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    this is great and i'm also feeling it :massage:
     
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    i'm so imperfect, my life is never
    straight and narrow, only crooked
    and bent, i'm so imperfect, my imperfection is
    perfect.


    that is tight!!! one of those, "nobody's perfect" poems!!!
    keep writing!!
     
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    :bingo: ...

    This is a tight thought my brother verb!

    :bullseye:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    brutha u express the truth of many and my self
    so so imperfect ......love the vibe of this piece
     
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    The way you laced irony and imperfection...very crafty. How we often trip over our own feet without even trying. Keep those flows coming.
     
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    Word, baby. I feel where you're comin from most intensely.
     
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    YO BRO DEFINIT, feeling this piece.
     
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    hmmm...it is rare
    that I say this
    to avoid sounding typical...
    but "this was deep"
    and it flowed just like
    a "quick thought"...

    Simple...yet profound

    *Snaps*
    Sage
     
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