Black Poetry : immaturation

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  1. liviti

    liviti Active Member MEMBER

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    her breasts hung heavy, even in their budding youth -

    the transition from flat to flattering
    happening seamlessly overnight

    and as

    beautiful as they were in their own right

    they needed no training-

    unlike those whose defaming words
    she followed down an elementary hall

    they .......
    were playing with fire-

    their pissing contests challenged each other
    to rise higher over playground fantasies
    of the ultimate winning team-

    she sang heavy-chested last-to-be-picked blues

    and screamed a violent red stream of obscenities,
    on paper and in person-

    a first rate curser out the mouth of babes
    and into devirginized waters-

    the sound of a thousand cherries popping simultaneously rivalled needlessly

    with the outcomes of the sugarless vs. bubble choice made by highschool sweet tarts

    most of them still haven't found a voice ...

    but she found hers

    singing a sweet and blanketing "it's all good"
    when she was sixteen and flat on her back-

    with scared-to-death thighs shaking in time with her heavy-chested sighs
    and the perfume of grape bubble gum

    He was sticky and she was...

    Too old to know better, too young to do a **** thing about it...

    but he was high school sexy, with a thimble full of jism,
    wisdom that was half cocky, half ****

    hard stock on a soft mattress, and she came ...

    To the conclusion...

    that this heavy and sweating game of life
    was well-suited to girls who had blossomed at ten
    and then were promptly forgotten men
    in favor of math and imaginary numbers.


    she moved them along...

    in an abacus side-step dance
    of two at a time-
    little heavy-breasted girl in love with the rhythm
    and a slave to the rhyme


    that moved from nursery to cypher in the blink of an eye
    better suited to wide-eyed virgin wonderment


    staring at the befuddlement of it all...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    deep inside this flowed like a river jordan
    casting a wave ....Awesome scribe wow!
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    How eloquently you wrote of this sadness... the punishment and pain of growing up to soon. I am at a loss for words, as to what else to say, except that this was an excellent write.
     
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    Liviti...you personify poetry x's infinity
    Just when I thought I had touched
    the hem of the most eloquent and skillfully
    crafted poetry ever to be experienced...
    I read this poignant and original thought...
    chiseld into one of the most majestic poems
    I've ever had the pleasure of reading...

    You are a poet that has arrived...

    Love ur work!​
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    likes the vibe awesome work....
     
  6. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Brotha Liviti :wave: welcome back welcome back WELCOME BACK!

    now this...THIS...O My GOODNESS... whew my brotha...this was so well put together


    I am in awe of the depth that this scribe emitted

    it was spine-tingling...teach ya chile all da while love ya chile kina vibes

    I am loving it :)

    and i hope to see more of it :)
     
  7. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    uppin dis one again happy birthday
     
  8. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Glad U brought this back, $$.

    This was most definitely on hit.

    Peace.
     
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    So glad $$RICH$$ brought this back, cause I missed it the first time. 'The perfume of grape bubble gum' is such a powerful line, takes me there. Mad luv for this piece.
     
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    tzevi1278 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    whew, this was a wonderfully poetic piece. i enjoyed every line. great scribe

    Lyr1c