Black Poetry : imagine perfection

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  1. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Imagine Perfection

    A NAKED woman

    Perfectly sculptured

    Beautifully bronzed

    Stood at the entrance to Eden

    ~ Awash in morning sunlight’s glow

    Raven-colored hair fanned out from her face
    Like a halo
    Coarse and thick
    Yet its silky-softness refused to let it tangle

    Her smile was as vast as the open sea

    Her voice sang to me in rhythms so intricate
    They wouldn’t let me see the beginnings and endings
    Of the words she’d choose
    As I would lose myself
    In the sing-song of her wonder

    Although her physical attributes were youthful and true
    It was her mature grace that would capture you

    Nonetheless…

    Imagine her to be
    Six feet even…and growing still
    Hips flared wide…with a luscious build
    Legs
    Thighs
    Adding a chiseled touch
    Firm
    Tight
    Forget the apple-bottomed butt

    A tapered waistline…down from well-formed breasts
    As full as a “ready-to-suckle” sow
    But gravity paid them no mind

    ~ She was fine

    A feline neckline
    With lines as “defined and elegant”
    As beauty’s folklore

    ~ She was to be adored

    (And she was NAKED)

    She radiated the confidence of one who knows her place
    She was the original host for man-seed
    Never felt the need (for)
    ~ Clothing
    Never owning make-shift coverings
    To hide her splendor
    No sense of NAKEDness
    Do I remember

    She was REAL
    …In her perception of who she was
    Recognized and crafted
    By the hands of God
    (Just for Adam)

    Imagine: The perfect mate

    Imagine: Not only God-given beauty…but God-imagined beauty

    The earth was filled through her
    HER
    …of the rib of Adam

    She looked out on a garden named in her honor

    Her au natural splendor captured me

    I could not see
    …did not feel satan’s grasp take hold of me

    (as lust washed over me)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    beautifully laid out here poet ...i love this one it holds so much depth to her beings
     
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    Beauty Personified.....

    baller:
    I always have to exhale before and
    after I read you....you always
    take me somewhere beautiful.
    I felt proud to be woman after
    reading this BEAUTIFUL scribe.


    Much Luv
     
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    If the perfect woman was presented to you, mind, body, and soul, the physical aspects would be hard to ignore, even as you appreciate the rest. You are so thorough in your expression poet.
     
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    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    I agree w/Watz on your thoroughness!

    You leave none of the senses untouched! Visually and emotionally, mentally and spiritually, your words are palpable!

    Ahh, "the fall of man."
     
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    Lataisha Nicole Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is a very sweet, exotic piece. I'm feeling you right now on more levels than one. Bless!
     
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    I think sister Cherrys response best captures my own response

    I enjoyed the whole piece but the ending was the seal on the letter

    it was like closing a chapter to begin a whole new saga

    always enjoying your river brother :) :read:
     
  8. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    if you consider all the beautiful things GOD gives us

    ...it's interesting--for me--to imagine what Eve must have looked like...considering the imagination of GOD. AGAIN, GOD-imagined beauty. AWESOME.

    the river floweth.
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    man beautiful

    the way this was written man it helped the imagination alot

    i saw the vision in my mind the vision you helped created with this work

    peace
     
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    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow what a beautiful vision of eve. makes me proud to be a woman. this was very :welldone:
     
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