Black Poetry : I'm sorry, my love

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  1. Ikoro

    Ikoro Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    In my dreams,

    Where -no one- can see...

    What's inside of me...

    Wrapped up inside,
    My childish

    docile

    heart,

    Is a rarely revealed part.

    A part of my childhood,
    A piece more vulnerable than my naked eye.
    The biggest part of my reality that is wrapped up in a lie.

    A hollow shell of a person,
    As frail as a blind, lost child.
    Broken on the ground,
    Emotions inside running wild.

    I can write no more,
    My pen is...
    lacking.
    Low self-esteem is...
    counteracting
    -The will to heal.

    Strangled by my demons,
    Not allowed to speak.
    Tears are locked up in here,
    Why am I so weak...?

    I wanted you to correct me, but I tried to correct you.

    I'm sorry, my love.

    Please forget me, so I can forget you.

    ~Ikoro
     
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    deep yet willful to forget.
    indeed ya stronger then u know
    flow head express on !
     
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    The word of Mouth is power!
    First and formost ...always remember,
    *YOU ARE THE CAPTAIN OF YOUR SHIP*
    you and only "YOU" ..can take you where
    you want to go..or be.
    Nothing or no-one is stronger than..
    "YOUR WILL"
    Deal directly with your inside emotions and
    anything after that will soon cease...
    even the demons
    Nothing can stay inside of you,
    if you don't entertain it.
    ~Handle that Captain~​
     
  4. sweettee29

    sweettee29 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ikoro, this is very perceptive I love the style and form, you have spoken an ocean of words here and I can feel the depth of this piece. you get :star: :star: :star: :star: :star:

    sweettee, love
     
  5. Ikoro

    Ikoro Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh, thank you all for the comments and the love. I open my arms and embrace it gleefully.

    Really felt your reply there, Queenstwana, went to my heart.

    Working hard on my emotions, re-building the self is so difficult when your perception of reality has been twisted by all the WS and general crookedness of a broken childhood. But.. "Blackness, I'm steady dealin'".

    THANK YOU Sweetee :) I love your stuff. Appreciate the deep reply, very nice of you.

    ~Ikoro
     
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    :hi: Ikoro, you are such a sweetie, I love your flow style; 'tis so real and true. You did it again:spinstar:

    :read:

    :picture:
     
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    Ikoro Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you, Spicybrown :) Appreciate it.

    See that I messed up on the flow in the last part, thinking of editing it.

    Much love.

    ~Ikoro
     
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