Black Poetry : Im Not Ready

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  1. Versatile

    Versatile Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    He says He’s not pressuring me
    But he is
    So then I say
    Baby I’m not quite
    Not quite ready for that step
    We need to take it slow
    He insists he wants to make love to me
    And I think
    Why couldn’t he make love to my mind?
    Is that even possible
    Having sex with my intellectual capabilities
    In that area I got skills
    I can ride his mind into oblivion
    With my wisdom
    I’m sure he could reach his capitulation that way
    By getting to know
    Who’s really behind my Nubian skin
    Cause I’m not ready
    To have my…
    Stomach protruding
    Giving me stretch marks leading to my future
    I’m not ready to find out that
    You will leave me
    With nine months of carrying our weight
    With my now swollen feet
    And thinning hair
    My body chemistry messed up
    Because I gave birth to our baby girl
    With bags under my eyes
    From not just pushing her out
    But from waking up in the
    Middle of the night
    Singing:
    Hush little baby don’t say a word
    Mommas gonna buy you a mocking bird
    Notice I say Mama not Papa….
    Because Papa wasn’t here to wipe her tears away
    So that she will want to run into his arms each day
    With that big smile on her face
    No trust me, I tell him
    I’m not ready
    And never will be
    Because I Haven’t made love to your mind
    Therefore, I don’t know you
    I’m only doing this for my unborn child.
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    *clapping* ...to wisdom, I wish more of us would make that kind of intense love. Very well written poet.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    the expression leave a mark on the mind
    this was pose'd well and a very good poem
     
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    AHMOSE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for sharing this piece that "once I read I found myself not ready."
     
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    Versatlie this poem has some really great structure and colorful metaphors, I bet its sounds even better when performed. Good Job!
     
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    Say it LOUD Sister, love your work!
     
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    I enjoyed this piece sis keep it up!
     
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    this is such a great piece. you should really do this in spoken word
     
  9. DestinyLove222

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    Girl That Is Deep to The Core

    I really agree with you on the waiting. I myself am waiting for the right one, because I just feel deep down that the right one has to stimulate my mind first, then my body.
     
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