Black Poetry : ...i'm living a love poem.

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by GA_Sunshyne, Aug 12, 2002.

  1. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    he said that he
    wanted our romance
    to be
    poetical-ly correct…
    (or at least something
    fit for a LovePoetess
    )
    …then he asked
    if we could reside
    inside a collective vibe
    that would forever be
    sweet-ly characterized as
    OnlyOurs…his&mine…

    & by this time
    i was open w i d e…
    therefore soul-ly
    inclined to oblige…

    now i’m—

    free-breathing within
    every line
    quintessential-ly scribed
    every time
    his adjectives & verbs
    coalesce concise-ly with
    the beat of my heart
    giving birth to another verse
    that becomes an integral
    part of this amorous-ly
    beautiful work of art
    tentative-ly called:
    …magnificent.

    he then told me that
    once our peace(piece)
    was complete…
    …every fiber of my being
    would feign for the
    “open mic”…
    in hopes that i might
    speak on this ****
    & how verygood it is
    being loved by him…

    & he was right.

    ‘cause… truth be told
    every nuance of my soul
    yearns for the chance…
    to passionate-ly stand
    before curious crowds
    of inquiring minds…
    …letting them know
    (without a doubt) that
    i’m living a love poem.

    © SunShyneOrygynals 2002, all rights reserved.
     
  2. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I do

    feel this..

    thank you

    alyce
     
  3. poeticdelight

    poeticdelight Member MEMBER

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    i hear ya

    eloquent piece GA

    beautiful flow~

    pd
     
  4. UbZoRbShUn

    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    layne

    beautiful scribe... what do you have over there girl ? Great read. I'm taking note and errythang too.




    Lil Sis
     
  5. Reason

    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ahhhh....

    Now this is some Serious GA ****!!!! Mami you know you got down right?!? Im really happy to know that I inspire such greatness...lol (I know this aint about me, but lets keep that between me and you* shhh...)

    Madd Properz... You brought the funk on this hea witcho stankin ***!!!

    Reas
     
  6. mensahpoetic

    mensahpoetic Active Member MEMBER

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    its about time you actually finished this poem...it seemed like forever, but it was worth the wait :)

    This piece is an indication that you are still blessed with the written word...

    I love you...and I look forward to reading your next piece :D
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "quintessential-ly scribed" and then some.

    lady of the solar system, you're doing that thing you do so very well...and i'm so very happy for you.:)

    THANKS for sharing.

    1.
     
  8. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Queen/sister/friend,

    this is uh...(let me get my thesaurus)...sublime...no doubt simply...magnificent

    (and that sig...ooooo weeee...you's a bad gurl)


    Verb
     
  9. Gaylee

    Gaylee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WOW, I have so much to learn here from this one. Thank you and Congrats on such an awsome piece. And this poetic love is such a gooood thing.
     
  10. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    beautiful beautiful beautiful

    from a fan

    i mean what can i say
    this is some phat sh*t here

    4real

    DSS
     
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