Black Poetry : i'm feeling you jill

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by TotalView, May 11, 2011.

  1. TotalView

    TotalView Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    woke up this morning
    with a smile on my face
    he served me breakfast

    swam like a black cayman
    the length of the moruca river

    ran like a jaguar
    the lone road into santa rosa

    snaked like an anaconda
    through the rain forest

    flew like a harpy
    to the top of a tropical palm

    wiped images of me across his brow
    then plucked the perfect coconut

    chartered a plane to tanzania
    squeezed the flesh of ten papaya
    until they gave up juice

    cooled by the well
    on a bed of fig leaves

    rushed back on the concorde
    to top my cinnamon bun
    with homemade ambrosia
    fresh from a jelly jar

    fingered a love poem in my grits
    smoothed wrinkled blues from my sheets
    rubbed my aching feet with african peach
    swept misery's dust from my walls
    clapped his hands
    made the sun rise

    to warm my skin
    drew my bath water
    then dropped salt stones
    from the caribbean in

    and girl
    it aint even
    6 o'clock yet
    ha!

    © Kiwanda Paul
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice

    beautiful imagery that took me to places that eased my soul. THANK YOU.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    This had me taken in and my mind running loose , i love the view and vision
    this painted upon me....wow!!!!
     
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    Thank YOU, baller. Your words touched my poetic being and made her feel beautiful and whole. I truly appreciate the read and comment.

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    Thank you, $$RICH$$. Reading your words...all I can do is smile. Your comments mean a lot to me and they always make me smile. Thank you for that as well.

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    TotalView Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Just because I woke up this morning smiling and feeling spoiled. :hi::heart:
     
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    Express It Sis!
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    One for the book!
     
  9. TotalView

    TotalView Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sis, the man got me using emoticons. Okay?

    Thanks.

    (smile)
     
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    Working on it. Thanks for the gentle nudge. :heart:

    (smile)
     
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