Black Poetry : I'm Dying and Shot

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  1. GYPSYMAN

    GYPSYMAN Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I’m dying and shot,
    This wound that I’m
    Walking in ?
    Is starting to rot.

    Vision in the feet;
    …if I stand still, well
    the snow kills…
    so I’m chilly and hot

    all

    at

    the

    same


    time…

    if only I could lay down
    and die a certain
    death,
    wake up next to you
    to taste your first breath…
    I want to rest
    But I can’t….
    See
    The cold threatens my very stance
    The wind kills the fire
    The road is tired
    But this spot
    I’m in ?
    Is dark and thin...
    My knife is too dull now
    To break the skin of that feeling..
    That sensation of reaching
    For you
    in the mornings
    That unfinished sentence
    I start
    as if
    you can hear me
    The mirror threatens me deeply
    Lately even alley ways
    Won’t take my hate
    Of me being here
    And you
    not …

    I’m dying and shot
    This wound that I’m
    Walking in
    Is starting to rot

    Vision in the feet;
    …if I stand still ?…, well
    the snow kills…
    so I’m chilly and hot

    all

    at

    the

    same



    time…

    and
    my mind is foreign
    like a German in the forties
    I’m picking people out
    to persecute
    nothing done yet
    but
    I’m starting to stand at my window
    And sweat…

    Where you at ?
    When you coming ?
    I know its only been
    five weeks
    I know it’s the fifth
    So two thousand four’s
    got five red streaks

    I am
    Killing off days
    Figuring out
    brand new ways
    To murder time
    I really wanna
    Kill it all
    quick !
    So tomorrow dawns
    February
    …sh*T !

    I’m fit to be tied
    Accused and tried
    Said I could wait
    But


    I lied…
    I’m dying


    and shot
    This wound that I’m
    Walking in
    Is starting to rot

    Vision in the feet;
    …if I stand still ?…, well
    the snow kills…
    so I’m chilly and hot

    all

    at

    the

    same


    time…


    on a continuous journey
    Gypsyman
     
  2. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    yo...
    this was phat @ss hell man...
    chilly and hot...i can dig that holmes...
    one love
    khasm
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice drop
    it was i tight scribe
    peace
     
  4. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    good lord, this is off the chain! love this poetic journey you just took me on. vibin each word
     
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    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is FABULOUS!

    Loving how you brought this here, the word play was like a verbal
    symphony! And I am giving you a standing ovation...CLAP!CLAP!CLAP!

    Blessings On Your House!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    flow head liking dis here ....do yo thang
     
  7. GYPSYMAN

    GYPSYMAN Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks all for the read, i promise to get with you all individually , especially checking out your peices, gotta get some sleep right now, really..thanks for all of your words.
     
  8. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Brother...
    I sure am enjoying your vibe
    ...don't stop
    you've got a loyal reader in me :bowdown:
     
  9. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    your poetry is mind blowin' and

    always souldeep!
    Coco :heart:
     
  10. LibertyLady

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    hey gypsy man i feel this....piece..


    i wrote sumthing along time ago its a poem called help help help i,m shut or sumthing..


    but youre piece describes it better.....
    i mean that feeling that can be dangerous..
    so i make that quick run to god....other wise you loose yours self ..
    you know what i,m saying...


    but i know that feeling..
    one time it was so heavy it was as if 10 knives hitted in my chest..
    and than those tears those heavy ones...that goes with the longings...
    sumthimes only a childs smile can save you from a moment like that...





    Keep writting Poet..
    i feld this and welcome :wave:



    Love L
     
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