Black Poetry : I'm breathing (and it's phenomenal)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by blakverb, Feb 17, 2004.

  1. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    each one of your fingertips
    exorcise an experience
    the sun brought to me when it
    rolled the night up and smoked it's
    existence...I can breathe now
    ...each exhalation is an intonation
    of me loving the way you love me
    ...blak woman...

    paint me any color you wish
    I am your palette until God wrings out
    the earth of the lakes, rivers, oceans
    drying the land to create a new beginning...
    maybe I'll be your rib this time...
    ...I can breathe now...you fill my lungs
    with hope, faith, and a wind that is blown
    to keep my wings full...
    I stay afloat above all that faces a brother...

    those things that want to bury me
    with a blank headstone /to assume I
    didn't have a story...but I do and you
    the co-author of all that is we...I can flip
    the pages....I can breathe now...each fingertip
    resuscitates my spirit and I can soar...it
    is so phenomenal.

    Thank you.

    (c)2004 blakverb
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was like stepping outside after a spring rain and taking a deep breath. Very nice. And perhaps you and phenomenal ought to do a collab?
     
  3. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    whew Blak you blew up the spot. i'm feeling that...loving that. thanks
     
  4. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    watzinaname, thanks queen.

    phenomenal,

    naw I didn't blow up the spot...you did...I just continued to stoke the flames. thanks for the reply.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    man dis was the BOOMMMMMMMMMMM bomb !!
    flow head tell da story bruh !
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow!

    a fresh breeze, indeed. blak, this is really beautiful.
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is beautiful, i always was a fan of your work, but this right here takes the cake...a masterpiece...
    much love,
    -story
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I have NEVER felt more proud of being a blck woman until I read something this sweet.....


    Thank you blak
     
  9. FattDaddy2k3

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    TiGHT

    u really did ur thing dawg...keep it flowin!
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh my :blush: brotha this was SO beautiful
    sounds like someone has stirred brotha blaks BEAUTIFUL soul :)
     
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