Black Poetry : I'm Being Left Out

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Heartfelt, Nov 24, 2003.

  1. Heartfelt

    Heartfelt Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Time is quickly passing us by and we don't converse in the manner that we used to
    I wanted to wait until the day I met you in person, but your feelings have been forever changing and, like you used to be, I'm confused too
    Since the very first time we began talking, there was something about you that captivated me
    I didn't know what it was, but I was hoping to stick around to eventually find out what it could be
    There have been times when I would sit and think about you and I
    The future we could have and how we could spend each day of our lives
    Those thoughts that, at one time, floated around in my brain haven't been lost
    I'm trying to keep them alive in me at all costs
    I often feel helpless because I can't be the one to influence any of your decisions
    But I see you have your own life and you're trying to fulfill your own mission

    Truthfully, I HATE the change that you now possess
    And yes because it's not about me and only, seems it always has been, about someone else
    Everytime you confirm my internal allegations of engaging in another relationship
    My heart stops and I seem about ready to flip
    It seems you don't understand how jealous I get when I know that I can't be with you and someone else is
    Why did you metamorphose, transform your feelings, and leave me stranded like this?
    I hurt, and the pain is emotional
    I never strayed because, to you, my love was always devotional
    I don't know what's in store for my future
    But when I contemplate things, I see that I was never on your mind...just her
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Heartfelt.. Spring follows Winter. Then it heats up in the summer. All for a reason. A season of ever change is love. It doesn't take in account your age. race. sex or place. it just takes and gives as it moves thru. Flow with what you have. Miss what you don't. But never give up on Love. I feel the heart strings that connected years ago, and they keep coming back. It feels good. It re-assures me that I had it all. Still got it and could get it if I wanted it. Some love comes and never leaves. Be it bad love. good love. It comes. Only the good should remain. I can count on one hand those that touched me the most. I had no salon swinging door on my life. But those that kicked it in remain.
     
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    feeling the tension
    in your drop
    indeed
    release it all
    let it pour
    much love to you
    Peace
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whoaaaa.....
    i feel da emotions flowin and the tention rising
    this was a deep scribe indeed
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dear 17, you are extremely talented. Should you ever want me to represent you sign here:

    x
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i feel the emotions as you write these words...
    stressfull and pain...this was a very deep scribe...:angel1:
     
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    AfroBoricuaRoni Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was beautiful. i feel the piece because i can relate. you managed to express what i wrote many poems trying to say. good job.

    Roni :heart:
     
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    Looking in my crystal orb I see that your future looks very promising.

    Although you'll go thru a few heartbreaks and you'll think you'll never love again, that special one will sweep you off your feet.

    Just keep your head up & your shoulders back, you'll be obie kaybie.
     
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    If he's smart, one day he'll realize what he could have had, and it will be too late for him, but right on time for you. 17....Keep writing talented young sister.
     
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    Heartfelt Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you all for being able to relate to my words and the way I feel. I know I just have to keep moving on... that's just the way life is. I'm very appreciative of your responses. Once again, thank you.
     
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