Black Poetry : ILLUSIVE

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by poeticlyspeakin, May 19, 2004.

  1. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WHEN I SIT IN MY 4 CORNERED ROOM
    I CLOSE MY EYES & THESE THOUGHTS CONSUME
    MY BRAIN & SOMETIMES I SWEAR I CAN SMELL THE SCENT OF HER PERFUME
    AND WHEN I GET THE URGE TO TOUCH MYSELF
    THEN PLEASURE OVERCOMES ME & SOMETIMES I SWEAR IVE FELT
    THE CARRESS OF HER FINGERTIPS BURNING ME UNTIL IVE MELT
    AND WHEN I SEDUCTIVELY LICK MY LIPS
    I SWEAR UP AND DOWN THAT I TASTE THE SWEETNESS OF HER KISS
    AND FOR THAT MOMENT I ONLY EXIST IN THE CAPACITY OF HER BLISS
    WHEN THE ROOM FALLS SILENT I PROMISE YOU I HEAR
    HER WHISPERING SWEET NOTHINGS INTO MY EAR
    AND I FIND MYSELF RESPONDING BACK ALTHOUGH HER WORDS ARENT VERY CLEAR

    BUT ITS ONLY MY IMAGINATION
    TAKIN ME TO PLACES
    WHERE ME AND HER TOUCH
    WITHOUT EMPTY SPACES
    BETWEEN THE 2 OF US
    & WE CONNECT ON A MUTUAL BASIS
    WHERE WE MOLD OUR BODIES
    ACCORDING TO OUR FACES
    AND CRY TO PLEASURE WE CREATE
    WHILE WE MOVE @ DIFFERENT PACES
    AND EVEN THO IM HAPPY & I DONT RECCOMEND ANY CHANGES
    I STILL WOULD RATHER PHYSICALLY LOVE HER

    WHILE LAYING ACROSS MY BED ON MY BACKSIDE
    I SWEAR I FEEL HER LEGS STRADDLE ME WHILE SHE RIDES
    & WORKS IN SLOW MOTION LIKE SHE'S SURFING ON HIGH TIDES
    AND WHEN HEAVY DROPS OF WATER POUR DOWN ON ME IN THE SHOWER
    I PROMISE YOU I FEEL HER PRESENCE RIGHT BY ME WITH THE POWER
    OF MAKING COLD WATER FEEL LIKE ITS HOT WATER, SO I FIND MYSELF STAYING THERE FOR HOURS
    WHEN I RUN MY FINGERS THRU THE STRANDS OF MY HAIR
    I FEEL HER WARM BREATH ON MY NECK AS IF SHE IS THERE
    & MY KNEES BUCKLE BECUZ THE THOUGHT/ ILLUSION IS HARD FOR ME TO BEAR
    I PROMISE YOU I SEE HER STARING BACK @ ME WHEN I LOOK INTO THE MIRROR
    AND EVERY BLURRY PICTURE IS SEEN JUST A LITTLE BIT CLEARER
    AND LOSING THAT SIGHT OF PERFECTION BECOMES MY GREATEST FEAR

    BUT ITS ONLY MY IMAGINATION
    TAKIN ME TO PLACES
    WHERE ME AND HER TOUCH
    WITHOUT EMPTY SPACES
    BETWEEN THE 2 OF US
    & WE CONNECT ON A MUTUAL BASIS
    WHERE WE MOLD OUR BODIES
    ACCORDING TO OUR FACES
    AND CRY TO PLEASURE WE CREATE
    WHILE WE MOVE @ DIFFERENT PACES
    AND EVEN THO IM HAPPY & I DONT RECCOMEND ANY CHANGES
    I STILL WOULD RATHER PHYSICALLY LOVE HER
     
  2. rasheed

    rasheed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    poeticlyspeakin,
    Excellently and eloquently poetically expressed.

    and by the way......sounds llike U got it BADDDD
    and that souds real GOOOD.

    Peace and Blessings.....
     
  3. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It's rare that we see you these days...
    but when we do...

    You kick the door down with a Blaze...

    :hot: :hot: :hot: :hot: :hot: :hot: :hot: :hot: :hot: :hot:

    The passion is so thick, it's like lava...

    Your raw, unabashed expressions take the mind, soul and "body"...

    to uncharted territory...

    Consider me..."Officially Impressed".... :hot:
     
  4. Dior Robynsonne

    Dior Robynsonne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    SIMPLY DELICIOUS!!!!!!!! CAN I PLEASE SAY ****!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :jumping:
     
  5. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :jawdrop: Young sister, this piece just drips of sensuous longing. Nothing more I can add. Superb!!!!!!
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Here's what I can say...
    NOTHING!!
    why?? ...because I'm speechless...wow...​
     
  7. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks yall

    im sorry im not on here more often, but i have a really busy schedule. much love n respect...
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is such an amazing piece, and so uniquely you. Shine on, young poet, your light is very bright.
     
  9. afrostotle

    afrostotle Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey Poet-Teacher......This was beautifully crafted, and delivered. It's not often someone can touch me like this...I know it wasn't for me....but I swear to "cheeze-n-crackas"...this was powerful.....One Love...for URBLESSED!
     
  10. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks Gempis and Afrostle

    thats madd love right there. Im sorry im late on replyin... much love n respect.