Black Poetry : If you need me just call my name...I'll see you between the verses

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by blakverb, Jan 30, 2004.

  1. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    when we are apart..i can feel
    the iron in my blood drawing me
    close to you...I said
    you were magnetic...a wave of
    your hand controls the alignment of the
    planets
    the spin of the earth
    ..sometimes counterclockwise so we
    can relive yesterday...when we watched our abstractions
    dance naked on the palette of the sun
    in twelve acts...

    we are syncopated to each others
    metaphors and similes
    like our existence is the language of
    love...an arrow that has entered the
    womb of a broken heart...and
    is reborn as a sky after the rain

    when we are apart...if you need me
    just call my name...I'll see you between the verses
    in the space that connects us on a subliminal level///
    you drop I drop we both sink into
    imagery that our right side creates
    and we find ourselves caught in metaphors...
    like we are the ninth wonder of the world.


    (c)2004 blakverb "off the top thinkin"
     
  2. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lucky, lucky lady...
    you deserve a standing ovation for that piece...well done

    it's the bomb!!
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was tight....
    what a lucky lady....
    ya got me blushin....
    i am gonna go now..
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    blak, you are a such a delight to read. Tyte verse
     
  5. angelicsage

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    The iron of your blood, drawn to her magnetism

    Her hand controls the alignment of the planets

    Sometimes counter clockwise

    A palette of the sun

    Twelve acts…




    I was lost between the verse after the first stanza

    Brother…your poetry is intrinsically linked to the concept of “woman”… :bowdown:

    Encore :spinstar: Encore :spinstar: Encore :spinstar:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    so sweet , so beautiful
    and well heard this was awesomely lovely
    flow on brutha Verb
     
  7. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    good lord. blakverb, your poetry knocks me off my feet the same way angelicsage's does. have you thought about doing a collabo, or if you have, could you tell me where it is? this piece here is SO dope
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Words so eloquent and devine, just captures my mind...wow.
     
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    CindyC Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I stil love reading you!
    So, I am calling your name!
    Verb, your sister needs you!
     
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