Black Poetry : If This Turns Into a Poem, So Be it

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If this turns out to be a poem, so be it.
    I'm walking
    and wondering
    the snow is crrunching under my feet
    Where is my life going?
    Where is it taking me?
    Am I doing the right thing?
    Am I walking the right way?
    I keep doing the one step forward,
    two steps back shuffle
    I just don't know...
    If this turns into a poem, so be it.
    Poetry
    Means the world to me.
    It flows endlessly, in my mind
    all the time, the words
    one after the other
    pulse through my soul
    capturing me whole,
    so that I just have to write it down
    as I walk on this icy ground
    God and me
    What will it be?
    Do I have it in me to do this?
    I can't see from the tears streaming
    It's so cold.
    I have to stop.
    Has life worn me down and out?
    Is that what it's all about?
    Can't be, because now it's just me
    Me and God...
    If this turns into a poem, so be it.
    If this turns into a poem, so be it.
    If this turns
    into a poem....
    so be it.
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This joint is TIGHT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Love the title, loved the flow. Spoken.

    The poetic shot heard around the world.

    Envy, be still!
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Gee, you loved the title and the flow? Well, thankyou, 1poet for feelin this.
     
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    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I loved the title too name.......and I loved the poem as well.....the surrounding and stuff made the message even clearer.....much love for this flow......much love
     
  5. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Glad you're diggin the title and the icy surroundings, thankyou Foxi.
     
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    rasheed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i heard dat, So B it!
    Super Flow

    Peace and Blessing
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I too find that nature pushes me into deep reflection. I feel where ya comin from, watz.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    So B it, Rasheed, thanks for lettin me know you felt this flow.
    Thankyou Gempis, yes nature can make one's mind go in deep mode.
     
  9. arthur1210

    arthur1210 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yeeeah!!! this is sweet. I was feeling you here...
    Thanks, as always
     
  10. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for feeling this flow, arthur, it was just going through my mind as I was walking....
     
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