Black Poetry : If Only.....

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  1. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Deep within the ocean
    Upon the floor
    The darkness roars
    As the waves rock
    Heavenly battle within
    As the pain seeps
    And love takes hold
    Drums in afar off distance
    As the love flows
    Just the loneness takes over
    Lost in the wind
    Blind to the taste
    Hurt to no return
    As the night becomes colder
    The heart yearns more
    Deep within the ocean
    Upon the floor
    The darkness roars
    But......
    If only for one night
    The light would shine
    And take away the pain
    If only for one night
    You touch my heart again
    Hold me tight and
    Tell me everything is alright
    If only for one night
    Take me in your arms
    Kiss the pain goodbye
    And let the love flow
    Within our veins
    Just do what you do
    Mold my soul
    Mold my being
    Mold my heart
    If only for that night
    I know the love is alive
    I feel each day....
    But for now....
    Deep within the ocean
    Upon the floor
    The darkness roars
    And the pain cuts...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    dis was heavy and deep indeed wow!
    u really out did ya self on this one
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you happy you ejoyed as you did
    peace
    Angel
     
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    awww sister *sigh* thats some real pain right there smh
    hopes for a better day
    I feel you sister i do
    :grouphug:
     
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    it's funny how pain...
    creeps up on you in the night
    it's like the two go hand in hand
    suppose we think of love as light...
    nice rhythm in this piece...
     
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    that was deep, i actually could feel the sadness reading it. and your last two lines just left it lingering. nice flow
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :hiya: thanks for the support on dis family

    Peace
    Angel
     
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    This was really a heartfelt piece. Trying or not trying, you was able to make the reader feel your emotion.

    The feeling was like just being inches away from something you pray for everyday..and then being suddendly pulled away from it. Reality is pain.

    One luv
     
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    soon and very soon sistah it will passby and da pain stops the healing was
    felt inside da flow most welcome
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Mind~$oul..thank you for the words and support on the scribe....

    $$RICH$$...indeed...thank you for the giving here on dis scribe

    Peace
    Angel