Black Poetry : if only

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Queen_Nemesis, Aug 16, 2003.

  1. Queen_Nemesis

    Queen_Nemesis Member MEMBER

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    honest caring
    kind secure
    one look from him and suddenly they would allure
    the rhythm in his words
    and the beat in his walk made life
    just seem like a beautiful love song
    if only

    his eyes were hypnotic
    theytook her to a place where everything
    is beautiful
    soft but strong
    silent but heard
    simply being in his sight gave her exuberance
    if only

    his hands wiped away pain
    hurt and hate
    resentment sorrow
    they smiled and together
    they smiles lit up the room
    his fingers were never used to hurt and always used to heal
    if only

    if only she had ever experienced this kind of love
    if only every beautiful thing she said about him was true
    if only he loved her
    if only his eyes did not represent hot black coals
    if only his hands were not brick walls
    if only his walk and words didn't scare her
    if only she could stop writing these poems
     
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    Dream Weaver Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ya I know, this was very nice...If only...

    The Dreamer
    Totally feelin...
     
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    wow.....tyte flow ! :)
     
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    yes this is so floetic :)
     
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    if only his hands were not brick walls "

    wow, i think that's the tightest line thus far, nice piece, liked this one:martian: :wave:
     
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    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Touched me deeply. If only I had never met him. . .
     
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    if only i can start a new again
    tight flow
    Peace