Black Poetry : IF ONLY YOU’LL HAVE ME

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  1. garlicsalt99

    garlicsalt99 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    IF ONLY YOU’LL HAVE ME

    If only you’ll have me, you’ll arrive at the following evaluation
    You’ll see that I would vow to protect your good name and reputation
    No matter where I might find myself in life or location
    Always encouraging your election and calling, and applauding your vocation
    The space in my life I’ll have for you will be one of honor and rectitude
    Esteem, integrity ... and the utmost in fortitude
    But the only way for you to know for sure, you have to make this a must see
    As I do the right thing even when you’re not looking, giving you every reason to trust me
    I want the opportunity to show you faithfulness all of which opposes slander
    I want the chance to engage you as you engage me in conversational candor
    To accent each others strengths and to shore up each others weaknesses
    To walk in each others likeness and appreciate each others uniqueness’s
    Allow me to show you the truth of me, as truth is longevity
    Give me the opportunity to prove to you my character and integrity
    I promise to be every bit of man for you that I can be
    I promise to be your object of fidelity … if only you’ll have me

    If only you’ll have me I promise to share your conceptions
    Your outlook, your tenets and beliefs, your rationale and perceptions
    To bring about in each other an inherent potential to be evoked
    To walk together side be side, and hand in hand, and stand together equally yoked
    To be graced while in the propinquity of the Kings daughter
    I want to stand together with you, like two trees planted by the rivers or water
    That will ultimately … bear their fruit, in their season
    And be to each other, one another’s rhyme and one another’s reason
    To be regaled by a princess would be an honor and a privilege
    Cordial company and congeniality … all with a civil edge
    Just to sit and talk with you … to listen to your oration
    Makes me want to bow to you, because I consider your presence an ovation
    With a pure heart I want to love the ‘you’ that I’ve come to know
    With pure thoughts, I’d like – through my intentions – come to show
    With all of the principles and convictions that reach out and grab me
    I want to be your helpmate … if only you’ll have me

    If only you’ll have me that alone would make my heart sing
    I’d wear the pride, dignity and esteem like a coveted gold ring
    Of having you by my side … signaling an auspicious omen
    Because the saying is true, besides every great man … is a great woman
    You’d be the oxygen in the air that I breathe
    You’d be the wet in my water, and the arm in my sleeve
    You’d be the comforts of my consolation and the remedies of my relief
    You’d be the hopes of my aspiration and the convictions of my belief
    You’d be the thread in my fabric and the shine in my sun
    You’d be the seconds in my minute and the o-n-e in my one
    You’d be the one that I cherish beyond an affirming nod
    Second … of course … to Almighty God
    I’ll admit to feeling a little less than alone when we’re apart, at a given instance
    I’d feel a little less than lost if you weren’t in my existence
    I’d feel the handicap of a partially blind man who can half see
    I’d love for you to be the sight in my vision … if only you’ll have me

    If only you’ll have me I promise to be more of the person that you know and love
    Kind, courteous, compassionate, encouraging … by and large, all of the above
    To see you as you, as I have seen you … since the beginning
    The words you speak that have me thinking, and your smile that has me grinning
    I do realize that I’m putting myself out there in this manifesto of sorts
    Not knowing your reaction to these words … your response or resolve and resort
    And thinking to myself of the best ‘worse case’ scenario that can be founded in fact
    If your answer is to friendship, and friendship only … I’d be fine with that
    However, if your reaction and answer is as I hope it will be
    As I wait with anticipation … and breathe ever so stilly
    I will see sunshine and moonlight in a very different way
    All colored with a new excitement … spurred by the words you have to say
    Whatever you decide, to whatever bound … or to whatever ends
    Whether it be a move to matrimonial commitments, or to that of lifelong friends
    I will love you with an honest love that’s saliferous like salt, yet sweet like candy
    I want to love you with forthright affections … if only you’ll have me

    Written by: Charles
    © 2008
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Outstanding Flow



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    garlicsalt99

    This is a bomb flow. I enjoyed reading every line. Wow it has so much grip in how things can be weaved.

    I even had to look up a word. You flowed well here.:drums:
     
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    Here you go again garlicsalt...Here I am sitting at work minding my OWN business...and I see another Masterpiece post up...Let me get my coffee cause I'm gonna need something to stabilize me...LOL!!!

    P.S. I dont even drink coffee!!!
     
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    It's official! I no longer can read your masterpieces while at work. Mmm, Mmm, MMMMMM! My God! When does it stop?!?

    First of all, your skilz are off the charts! Your word choice coupled with the emotions conveyed throughout your piece is nothing short of perfection. I mean that!

    Secondly, Although I thoroughly enjoy your "usual" subject (believe me I do!), this piece "If Only You'll Have Me" (as if you didnt know what your title was...LOL) had me cringing...more so than any of your other works that I've read. The fervent desire and longing of a Godly man for his Princess (Queen) is one of the most sensual characteristics of man (in my opinion).

    Can a woman fall in love with simple words on a page...Heck yeah!

    I know it must take quite a bit of time to perfect your work but I could sure use one of these every week (hint, hint)...So all I can say now is.....NEXT!!!!!!!!!!!!
     
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    LoveDestiny, you're doing it again ... making me blush

    Hodee, thanx for stopping by and cheking out the flow.
     
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    Hey garlicsalt...I wanna read this (either tonight or another Friday) in the Poetry Throwdown but I need your permission first...
     
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    garlicsalt99 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'd be interested in the reaction ... tell me about it after you read it :) I look forward to hearing what the response was :)
     
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    Thanks! I definitely will!!!
     
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    If only she would have you, she would live in paradise, as you would bring her Eden. This piece tugs at the heartstrings, quite emotively posed.
     
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    Wow!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Wow, does not even begin to encompass the level of awesome that this flow was. Every time i read you i become more impressed than the last time. Your word selection, emotional sincerity and just plain old talent are quite awesome. Way to do the dayum thing!!!
     
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