Black Poetry : If I.........

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  1. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If I put my mind into your heart
    at what point within love would U start?
    What would you think you would find
    If I gave you this moment in time?
    If I gave you my past without the edited stuff
    what would U choose to remember the good or the tough?
    If I took every tear that has fallen from your face?
    Would that help the past pains in your life to be erased?
    If I awoke to U every morning and gave U a kiss
    what would be your response form mornings like this?
    If we sat in a car and took a long drive
    where would we go on such a ride?
    If your mind was in chaos and you felt lost
    would U come to me for comfort and let the pain be tossed?
    if we never spoke but we passed every day
    would U break the ice or let it stay that way?
    If we made love in the rain and had sex in the shower
    would U climb this man and mount this tower?
    if love was all or nothing and we started from scratch
    would U cook up some love like a chef and make a endless batch?
    lf, if was not a if and it became a when
    would this type of situation soon begin?
    or are U afraid of if's and U hide from when's?
    would this just be a fairy tail that has the quickest end?
    If our existence is the result or a higher plan
    Would you accept that you are my Rib and I am your man?
    If I got down on one Knee and said I want that forever type ****
    Would you allow the reply of "yes" escape from your lips?
    If I never said that you were the most beautiful woman my soul has touched
    Would you realize that was how I felt by my very touch?
    If I................
    Was never hurt by a woman and never had this pain
    Would you.......
    believe in me so we could end this game?
    If I?



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  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If I could climb out of this maze
    and get to the heart of the matter
    Would you still cling to the confusion of the former
    Or embrace the clarity of the latter?
    If I could compose my autobiography
    and you could read that it ended in we
    Would it make your best seller list
    Or would the print be too fine for you to see?
    If I could cook your favorite meal
    and watch you savor every bite
    Would you look forward to the leftovers?
    Tastes even better than the first night...
    If I could kiss you
    Tell you I no longer want to miss you
    Say that I truly want you in my life
    And don't want your fear to force me
    to dismiss you
    Would you kiss me back
    and relish this bliss too?
    Or would your belief
    that this is some kind of romantic myth
    Turn me back into your favorite toy
    that fear actually fashioned for you to play with?
    If I was able to step out of a dream
    and lay next to you in your bed
    Would you embrace me and face me
    Or pretend you were still asleep instead?
    If my ache could then leap inside your mind
    forcing you to recognize the same pain you dread
    Would you realize that I really am, what I say?
    Could you then get it through your head?
    Or resume your role in this tragic play?
    If I?​

    Caramelpython, I hope you don't mind, but I actually needed to flow with this, and I thank you for that. Your talent still astounds me. Welcome back brotha poet.
     
  3. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Whoaaa .."If I" ..wow
    This seemed so real between you two, like it was a real life thing going on, hey..that was so on point!! What a beautiful, awesome flow.
    Heyyyyyy Rattle Snake, welcome back brother, it's always good to see you come home :SuN040: ...and ..hmmm I see ya still grazing the grass ..QQn..
    not to mention, returning with a masterpiece :slobber: ...I still ain't mad at cha.
    Welcome home Snake, ...it's been way too long:qqb006:
     
  4. PLATINUMILLITY1

    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow...This Poem Spoke Rythms
    It was seriously a Number one Drop Poet!!
    I dont Know what You been told, but this Poem here came to rock the house:D

    If I was amazed
    at your talent and creative ways
    Would You Write me as a gift?
    Or have me dream myth?
    (And I dont Usually Do that!!!!!!shh:SuN034: Dont tell NOBODY!:deal: )
    This was :great:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wheeeewwwwww this was like wow...
     
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    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was deep almost felt like you were talking to me so much realizm in this piece.........
     
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    Mr. caramelpython:
    If I told you your words moved my soul
    and that Im sitting at the keyboard thinkn' dezaam
    this brothas pen it cold. Hella Hella flo....

    Give me more...


    Much Luv